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My love,come back

Hello love,
How are you?
I remember you from my nightmare.
I remember your perfect white wings.
now your just a ghost in a morgue...
your oh so clue less,
but oh so gone.
Just a memory.

We can fall in love.
It's what I need,
If its what you want.
I'd always be near.
never hidden from searching eyes.

we'll be different,
who says we cant.
and soon enough,
we'll dread death,
cause' we will never
want our life to end.

But your still just a memory.
A whisper long ago
never forgotten the words
But where did you hide?
Im sorry
I messed up!
Will you ever return and
stop the ache in my chest?

Dont worry about if im missing you
Your all I think about.
I miss you
Come home?
I'll make it right
I miss you

I need some one to care
and your ghost creates
a haunting chill in the air of this old house
As I lose my self I'll count the delicate
strands of a spiders webs
as the spider catches prey
devouring its innards
in a twisted way
Its just like you and me

Only difference is I'm still here
waiting for you to come home and
Stop this hollow ache in my chest.

I miss you
 
 
 
 
 

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  • oooh. I like this poem. you said a lot. very deep and emotional. good luck

    • Well, at the least I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for letting me enter your contest.

  • Very nice poem. congratulations on the honorable mention and best of luck in the contest


    -Steve-


  • theVIP
    April 24
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    love it


  • Emmabug
    April 20
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    This was amazing thank you so much for allowing me to read this! Your talent is fantastic.

  • 3 thumbs up Max!
    O.K.
    2 thumbs and a pinky!
    This write is as cool as a spider web appearing magically on a misty morning!

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