Weeping Willow Tree
sways and dances in the wind,
sending perfumed floras scent.
Humming Bird answers,
bravely entering the fray,
bees and butterfly’s follow.
Author notes
http://plaidguy86.deviantart.com/art/Windy-Willow-59943929
The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of
two three-line katauta with the following syllable
counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7.
A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem
may address the same subject from differing
perspectives.
In a list
A contest entry
- Sedoka Poetry by HerbalGoat.
525 points, ended April 24, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well done and congratulations on the gold. You've captured the movement of the springtime willow wonderfully.
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CONGRADULATIONS ON THE GOLD
beautifully written,a lovely picture painted in words, all is a dance, all is in motion -
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Thank you, I always enjoy the challange of writing a new form. It kinda stunned me when I discovered I won. Those unexpected wins are always the best one's
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yes i know
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Great job!
This piece holds great imagery and is well penned. As soon as I read "sways and dances," I found myself swaying, too. I could literally smell the scent of the tree and hear the humming bird and bees buzzing. -
Nicely complementary pair of linked sedokas - I like the image of birds, bees and butterflies "entering the fray."
Bill
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ah the wonder of nature smiles as flutters of wings and songs of nature spiral themselves into the leaves that whisper, a good poem
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