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Crush my spirit.

 

 

 

my frail dizzying head hides,

buried deep inside a dull, fading pillow case

& my lungs filling the stale air of old cotton fluff.

abstract aching, insecurity & confusion

lace together with force to crush my spirit.

my vision wavers & blurs,

needing to keep the flood gates closed,

& yet they leak still, absorbed into discolored fabric,

mirroring the heavy clouds outside my window.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • consternation imply
    August 2

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    The way you talk about a moment is majestic. Just putting your head in the pillow case and not explaining what is actually wrong while you are doing that very thing is so wonderful to read. I could almost see you there...it makes me want to cry to watch what you have just shown me. Imagery is why I put you on my fav's though. Beautiful again.


    • EverxEnding silver member
      August 2
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      Well thank you very much for the favorite!!
      That is really awesome!

      I'm glad you enjoyed this.
      I was very upset this day...i couldn't leave my bed.


  • Atrophya
    April 11
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    what happened love? =[


  • Candy Morphine
    April 10

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    Gorgeous. I almost forgot what the subject was i was so absorbed with the astounishing well used vocabulary.


  • Number 13
    April 10
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    awe =[

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