her tangible youth was lived
hidden in Bell Jars
tautly aligned to a hollow space,
raised where pressure and release
never touched
with fingers and toes pressing the glass
waiting for an epiphany
to break her water
open
only noticed
by the drifting absence
of clouds
until she discovered
how rain moves so lightly through
and within its shape
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I love the fact that Bell Jar is capitalized, perhaps in reference to the book and all that is included when I think of it (plath, suicide, brilliance, etc). The reference to birth by epiphany is so fitting, many of us are "born again" by such moments (I don't mean by religion per se). And the final lines are so magical, almost fragile sounding but rain can be soft and tumultous, as can woman...as can anyone who learns to move lightly in their own path.
I appreciate your creativity! -
this has a frightening beauty...your work
truly does touch something in me deep down.
i cannot pin-point exactly what it is, but you
do move me. love, lane
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this is the best i have read from you. it's so well connected...
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