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Seemingly Unharmed

With a broad smile, cheerful and inviting,
you would never guess her lips hid secrets of tribulation
and memories of fathomless torment.


Things aren't always as serene as they seem.




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Option 2
"Don't think there are no crocodiles because the water is calm."
Malayan Proverb

Sorry it sucks. But it's what I got, probably for personal reasons.

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  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    April 10

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    you drew blood with this one,, that was a strong thoughtfull piece in relation to the prompt,, well done indeed.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    April 10

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    I find myself saying to a lot of people as often as they say it to me. it doesn't suck. on a personal note.. when we think that our poems suck, they dont. other people dont see it that way and why not because there is something in your poem that they can relate to.. so next time when you think it sucks remember that.. I guess its the same theory as this the beauty is in the eye of the beholder

    now your poem I can relate to this so very much. the thoughts that i have run through my mind when I read this was wow, I just went through something that falls under this same thing.sort of like the calm before the storm. the last line hits the nail right on the head.

    excellent take on the prompt

    good luck
    kat


  • Xianaria gold member
    April 10

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    Doesn't suck
    Nicely done, I can feel the emotion.
    Best wishes in the contest ~


  • In Too Deep1
    April 10

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    Beautifully penned and deep take on the prompt. Although an ocean may appear to slumber on her surface, she dream in turbulance below. Hidden beneath her face, are all that have been consumed by the illusion of her grace. A most enjoyable read, and best wishes in the comp


  • islekine gold member
    April 10
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    Best wishes...always!

    Write on...


  • Age of Rain
    April 10

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    This sounds personal - as in you. I hope things are better or improving!


  • forbidden-colour
    April 10

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    It ended with a bang, Brilliant take on the prompt!
    Good luck
    Kind regards
    Sophie


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 10
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    Awesome.

    I love that last line.

  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 10
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    Good luck my sweet Daughter!

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