Chocolate eyes staring into mine
Melting in a pool of contentment
Smiling as your perfect mouth
closes in towards mine
Jostled by a rough elbow from behind
My reverie now broken
I see the scene for what it really is
You're with her again
Her eyes like aqua crystal
Her hair the colour of the wheat
Growing in the fields surrownding
Perfect ruby lips
A ragged breath catches in my throat
As you take her hand and walk away
I'm only the friend
And I'm jealous for you
Author notes
It's true to my life right now.
A contest entry
- Titles # 6 by cirque du soleil.
525 points, ended May 8, 2009, 20 entries
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ouch im sorry to hear that hun most men are complete idiots and don't know what they have when they have it, ...... I used to be one of the idiots it wasn't until very recently did I realize what i really wanted and needed in life or how many people i hurt on the way but just know we all have to experience the worst in order to enjoy the best
great poem with much love
Lucian"
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I'm sorry to hear this, girl. You deserve much better than him, yet your emotion was expressed so vividly that I must give you kudos. Your imagery and personification, as well as metaphors were amazing. However, you'll find much better, and it won't make you green with envy!<3
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Ohh...I like...
I have loved the word reverie ever since I heard it in Sheryl Crow's song "shine Over Babylon" last year. I'm so glad you used it :-)
I liked the ending alot. It's so hard to admit, even to ourselves that we're jealous.
Thanks for the entry! -
even though i said please do not use message in a bottle for the time being on the contest page, i doesnt apply to you..you can still use it
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