How sad that all the folk who guarantee
The lives of varied things that they produce
Can never know for sure when they'll receive
The only offer they cannot refuse.
A contest entry
- Abstraction by NickBlaze.
2000 points, ended April 30, 41 entries
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What a thought! Nicely done!
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good one
i like it. good one asgar . -
very nice...kinda cool that you leave it open to interpretatiion..it'll be interesting to see what kind of feedback you get. thanks for sharing...keep up the great work...peace and light, kp
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One of the first poems I have read so far in the contest that actually deals with abstract thought. The abstraction is defined by metaphors, which I interpret as parents raising children. However, the poem has a negative connotation, so the "offer" that cannot be refused can be anything terrible a child can "give" to their parent.
Death, love, marriage, happiness, and more could all fit. What was originally intended?
And, also, I find that the last sentence ran awkwardly, if you wish to revise it. -
huh?
Made me read it more than once.
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