tranquil were the smokey gray lights
in the morning mountain dew
riveted firmly on God’s fertile soul
hovered over the land
danced a sedated tune
submerged in the morning light
in devouring intervals
bountiful were the colors
in natures seductive perfumes
mystic melodies awaking their dreams
implanting words untold
go look around you
breath in God’s amour
Author notes
I Forget To Breathe ( 24 hr. Quickie)
A contest entry
- I Forget To Breathe ( 24 hr. Quickie) by poet2angels.
700 points, ended April 10, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Rhymes by Fire-Fly.
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I really liked reading this one and found it an impressive write, but I think it misses some depth from lack of punctuation - adding some in can really lead the reader to pauses that would add to it.
Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest. -
Awesome write here
Many times I have viewed such breathtaking sights I felt were for my eyes only .Bravo honey
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very well written
these words with that pic simple breathtaking. as always from you. kiss
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This is such a wonderful write I really loved this pom It is wonderfully written and it was a plasure to read.
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Beautiful!
"bountiful were the colors
in natures seductive perfumes"
Great line!
Uplifting and lovely!
Lynda
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