You will say you love and care,
but I will run astray;
You will hold me in your arms
but I'm so far away.
You put all your faith in me
and you give me your soul;
I can't do the same for you
'cuz I can't lose control.
I wish that you could see
that this pain led me to this;
Now it's time to let you go
to find a life in bliss;
I stray to a world beyond
to analyze its notions.
Secretly I crawl away
to hide from these emotions.
I have put myself to work
I find success through strife.
I look at their cultures
it adds purpose to my life.
You will cry, but I must go
and leave this all behind.
I'll no longer let a thought
pass through my busy mind.
Author notes
This is the story of a cold yet successful businessman who sells his soul to his line of work. A heartbreaking piece of a sacrificial trade. Breaking a heart to escape loss and failure.
I don't know if it needs more added to it. Feedback is most certainly encouraged.
Thanks,
BC.
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Broken hearted in the past for sure, avoiding new love (not opening the heart to new love) so as not to ever be hurt (again). Focusing on work instead, making it your love.
Nice write. So sad to hurt so bad, so many people need love and will return it, not gonna guarantee nothing tho lol, were all just too different for it too always work out right, and alot of people dont care enough to "work" things out 
. One less person now
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i truly loved this...so many have sold themselves to work...i know i have had to work more hours than ever but i refuse to sell my soul...great write!!
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This is a nice peice..but the last two line take away from the wonderful flow..Over ll this was a great write..It intells a part of you..and what's important to you..but it also kind of sad with the thought of loosing someone.I love how there is so much emotion and that it blends so well together.
Great wrtie, dear.
Sarah
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This was intended to be a sad poem and explains a very important turning point in my life that I've made. Once I had lost the last thing I dedicated myself to, I decided to pick up the sociology major. Sumcess is coming my way and as great as it is, I have somewhat detached myself from well, myself.
It isn't important I suppose and I sure there are those that would love to "psychoanalyze" my "condition", but I am doing what makes me happy. Much like everything else in my life, I will figure out what I need to know when I need to know it by myself.
I'm extremely independent, I'm a hard work and to a certain extent a "perfectionist" although I am not naive. Perfection does not exist but I always try to work 10 times harder than I even have to because people underestimate my talent and potential.
As far as this world's concerned, I'm a minerity. Perhaps I'm burnt out, perhaps I've been used and played one too many times, perhaps I'm growing up, but I'm to the point where I truly don't care. I work for me.
Aaah, sory, I went off on a tangent.
Thanks for reading:
BC.
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i enjoy reading your work so much! You are so fluid awith your words as if they just pour from your soul. I dont feel it is lacking or needs anything added, pretty much it is all there. Oh I just had this thought, of the possiablities later in life and have nothing left to fear of pain? For me your writing connects with me, I also admire your craft and talent. take care...
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Thank you so much. My various characters represent life itself. Someone overcoming conflict and realizing the necessary sacrifices.
Thank you so much. It does make me feel very good to know that my work makes such an impact on someone. I love to write and I feel as though ever since I've came here I've taken my literary career in a new direction.
As always, thanks for reading:
BC.
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I love this! When reading it I though of my friend and I. Long story and inside jokes lol. I love reading your work, it is always so inspiring! Keep it up! I cant wait till next time i get on to see what you have written.
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Thank you for your comment.
This is sort of an "out of nowhere" piece for me. I think it is lacking and needs more description, but for the moment that's all that came to mind.
Thanks for reading and I also have another one I wrote earlier today called "Beyond The Cave." Pehaps you might like this one, and I'd love to get your feedback.
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