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Seeing The Universe With The Eyes Of Another

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i.
She is nothing if not exquisite, a cherry blossom riding high on the wind’s boulevard. Her eyes are filled with knowledge and experience; her ears are able to grasp clips of broken words and, somehow, restructure them into an emotional masterpiece that leaves the reader in tears, a hand clutched to the heart. She is mauve, a magic carpet, that one phone call away, a never ending tunnel of “take me home’s”.

She is somebody’s baby girl, someone’s miracle.

ii.
He is everything but invincible, an expert at “12 Ways To Escape From Your Own Body”. The blood vessels of his insides are writhing in violent shades of indigo, jungle-green, and burnt orange. He writes in permanent ink because he is afraid of erasing, afraid of making the same mistake twice.

Escape method number one:
Don’t let her get too close.  

iii.
They are the epitome of altruism, bending and sculpting to fit each other in every possible way. He wants to use his love, yet he doesn’t know the basics. So she uses subtitles to help him understand, but she can see that the pyramids in his crooked eyes are falling, crumbling into rich, golden particles. Not even the flannel sheets, where they shed promises and collected kisses, can hold them safe anymore.

iv.
“I am stronger than love,”
she tells him, wrapping her damaged fingers around his familiar wrists. The grass is gentle and consoling; the Milky Way pulsates in the night, fighting the skyline, the stars scattering wildly like confetti.

He pulls her closer, but his arms are hesitant, cautious. “I’m glad one of us is.”
he says, snapping her heart like glass for the third and final time.

v.
He comes to her a week later, sobbing. She can’t believe that a man who has given her no emotions for three years is lying on her bedroom floor in tears.

“I want to be better,”
he chokes on the words. “I want to be stronger, for us. But I don’t even know where to begin. I hope you haven’t written me off just yet.”

His love is convulsing in and out of shape, bending and warping like dark blue amphetamines, like ghosts.

“It’s okay.”
Two simple words. Two more reasons to feel alive. She touches his nervous palms and he is instantly still. “We can both do better. Welcome home babe.”

Author notes

Prompt: "Love is when you put forever around their hearts."

s h e s t i l l s m i l e s x
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  • Faithfully Yours x
    November 28
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    omg sis, i love this
    too amazinggg

  • This is beyond amazing- its so breath taking and beautiful.
    Wow!
    Amazing write!
    WRitingFree

  • First off, instead of copying & pasting the entire poem, hahaha, this is simply I think one of the best things you have ever written. No lie. The first stanza was full of beautiful and engulfing images and metaphors that are just simply incredible and mindboggling to me. The whole construction of this poem was honestly brilliant.

    -Escape method number one:
    Don’t let her get too close.
    ...

    Ohhh, wow. I read that an couldn't breathe for a quick instant. hahaha. Silly me =) I absolutely love that. It's such a simple statement, yet so contagious. I pretty much know how that is.

    -They are the epitome of altruism, bending and sculpting to fit each other in every possible way. He wants to use his love, yet he doesn’t know the basics.
    ...

    I love the power in those lines. There's such a sense of a jumble of emotions that are so well thought out through this part. Beautiful. :] (yeah, I know, I need new describing words. baha)

    -His love is convulsing in and out of shape, bending and warping like dark blue amphetamines, like ghosts.
    ...

    Ahhh. Hoe!? WHAT IS THIS? Probably one of the best things I have ever read, possibly!?! Gawd. Never stop writing you goon. :]
    I love this poem a lot. Whatta surprise. I really wish I could give you some constructive criticism, but really, I can never find anything to criticize :/

    LOVEYOU♥

  • this is an amazing poem, there is so much emotion in it, and its a beautiful story that your telling.
    My favourite kind, where the person who shows no emotion finally does to the one they love.

    this is really amazing, you are very talented.


  • decode
    April 16
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    oops, forgot the clappy dudes! sorry!

  • decode
    April 16
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    adding you as a favorite because of this poem. seriously. <3

  • This is simply breathtaking. A fantastic piece
    A great take on the prompt

  • LoVe It...


  • Ali - Pie
    April 9

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    amazing!

    hey bria! im sorry i havent been on allpoetry often, things are rocky here. how have you been?

    this poem is quite lovely, and true! everyone should put their heart on the line if they really love someone. beautifully expressed!!! ♥

    ♥ali

    p.s. i always love the pictures u choose for your writings!


  • Sunkissed xo
    April 9

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    Simply incredible..
    Every single one of your poems blows me away.
    Amazing emotion here.
    I could read and reread this over and over again and find something beautiful and fresh in it each time
    Keep up the incredible work! <3


  • new born
    April 9

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    that's really beautiful. i love your descriptions & the use of colour and dialouge. this is utterly heartwrenching, truly amazing.
    my favorite part would have to be ii. v. is amazing too, though.
    great job, best of luck!

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