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The Death of Who?

Through darkness and light, we'll go 'round again

The beating and screaming will soon begin

Not once have I wondered, or worried in shame

About you, the conceited, your dreams are my pain

The ring of truth echoes loud in my ears

The death of you quiets my fears

I'm not the girl I used to be

Instead of you, it's the death of me

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Written March 4th, 2004

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  • Trystane
    December 10, 2006

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    Nice write, good meter, mostly. The rhyme is a little awkward in the first two lines, but it works. The emotion comes through, though.

    Cheers,

    Tryst


  • lovelessgravitation
    March 5, 2004
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    Very good job! fantastic flow and some much emotion! Great job, Good luck, thxz for following the rulez so far...
    Abbie


  • Dreams Are Bad
    March 4, 2004
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    hella-cool

    Hella-cool poem. Excellent flow, wonderful wording, plus alot of power behind the words. Grooviness...and hey, thanx fer the comment on my poem.
    Peace.Love.Skittles.
    Crystal