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Dancing Fumes.

 

 

 

 

 

white swirls of spiraling smoke fade & reform

with each puff off of a perfectionist's hand rolled joint

coughing, static rippling through chest to knee & back

gagging on dancing fumes hanging in the air

eliminated by sun rays penetrating through an open window

breeze playing around burning orange embers

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • consternation imply
    August 2
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    YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL! My playlist is noxpreshun...what's yours?


    • EverxEnding silver member
      August 2
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      You're too sweet.

      playlist.com you mean? My screen name is KillingKrista .
      I haven't been on in a while. I should make a playlist for here on AP though!!
      I think i'll do that now


  • Candy Morphine
    April 9

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    I think the thing i like best in the first line is the use of the word 'reform'.

    breeze playing around burning orange embers
    -Beautiful ending line.

    I just love the imagery you use. it's so precise and delicate




























  • Number 13
    April 9
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    naughty, naughty.