Take me away,
Fly on wings of hope.
Soar above the pain,
To a place where I can cope.
Deal with all this anger,
Beauty carved in clay.
Extinguish this hatful fire,
And live another day.
In the book of life,
I wish to write a page.
Be free of all this strife,
And live well beyond old age.
So scribble these thoughts,
Upon paper of ivory.
Describe this before it rots,
In charcoal ink of insanity.
Hide the book away,
Never speak of it's pages.
Hidden until my final day,
When I will then relaese the rages.
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The rhyme was great.
Deal with all this anger,
Beauty carved in clay.
Extinguish this hatful fire,
And live another day.
Beautifully written.
Great job.
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wow.
great write.
I loved the rhyme
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A hopeful piece you have here. You can let pain go, as long as you are willing. Nice rhyming in this one as well. Keep it up, nice job once again.
MxA
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This is a good poem but just watch for cliches because they take away from meaning (i'm not just talking about your poem) --
"live another day" "fly on wings of hope" etc.. and also, the last stanza seems to have a different voice than the others.
but i really do like the message and i especially like stanza 3.
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amazzing
amazing
keep writing
i think your great
iyl xx
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Incredible
one super small spellin error release not relaese
any ways this is absolutely a very beautifully penned poem and I really love how you penned this write its so amazing how you write and I really love the over all flow depth and beauty you always place forth into all f your writes. any ways just a rally well penned enjoyable write and keep on penning away as I also enjoy reading your poetry and can never get enough
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hey hun!! this is an awsome poem!!!! I love the way you write its so amazing!! keep it up I cannot wait to read more, ill be posting some of mine soon. take care talk to you soon...once again great write <3
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