Oh it is too cliche
to take an early train.
Oh my love wont you stay
just for a little while longer?
I wanted to make you mine.
Oh my love don't pick up those bags
How can you see me crying
Falling at your feet
and say that you're not coming back?
I see the ticket in your fist
and i see the look on your face
and i know that
you are going to ride away today
and never look behind.
so take that train and ride away
because now i truly see
that you don't care...
Author notes
this was inspired by The Beatles' song "Ticket to Ride"
(i really wanted this to be so much better than it turned out to be haha)
A contest entry
- Beatles. by Emmyb.
900 points, ended April 13, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love that makes me cry/Yiruma (prewrites and freshwrites) by evershine-90.
760 points, ended October 21, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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great write! really liked how it unfolds beautifully written. Thank you for entering. best of luck!
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lovely. romantic. and sentimental. beautifully written .:
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thank you
i try haha
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