They sat under the moon. Soft grass comforted their feet. The stars anchored in the sky. He wondered if he could count them. A falling star came by. Her warmth was nostalgia when it touched against his own. His thoughts swirled with shades of hope. If there was melody in silence, they were composers. Only the two of them heard its music.
“we used to be falling stars.”
“why aren't we now?”
“you were wished on. that's why i came true.”
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Orange weaves the horizon, the signal of morning's light. The arcing outline of the sun slowly rises. They watch with eyes reflecting endless tulip fields and ocean beds. The vastness blinds them, and they glue memories from broken ceramic visions. They realize that shortness of breath is the taste of clarity, bitter and unrelenting. Things start to make sense.
“we’ll forget it all someday.”
“i know. ”
“it's funny.”
They listen to the crashing tide, and feel the quiet sweeping of the clouds.
“we'll only fall again.”
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They will spend days riding steam engine trains and just letting the sky bleed away. She will be the gentle frost within their snow globe world, and he will be its arctic wind. They will roam arid lands and walk on stagnant waters, and leave smoking spirals in their wake. He will sleep on mahogany floors and she will keep herself awake to admire his sleeping face. With each passing storm, they will rejoice. Time will pass as fast as Saturn’s rings. They won't look back. They will simply fade again, dreaming.
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He hums a familiar tune, as they lay under the moon's hypnotic glow, ever absorbed in the darkness of the night.
"what's your favorite constellation?"
He smiles.
"us."
Author notes
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Inspired by: Twenty-one Words for Forever. 
- The Poets of Nature group list • next in list
- Poetry Circus group list • next in list
A contest entry
- for blue, blue skies. [be inspired] by aanika.
5317 points, ended April 25, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best Prewrites on Ap by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended May 25, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This was really good to read and I like how you
presented those feelings as well as the harmony
of nature..enjoyed the read
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Great poem!! The words was just amazing I loved this there was such imagination in this!
The Positives:
Great style! I thought that was very neat. You did an awesome job.
The Negatives:
Nothing that I see great job
My Favorite Part:
They will spend days riding steam engine trains and just letting the sky bleed away. She will be the gentle frost within their snow globe world, and he will be its arctic wind. They will roam arid lands and walk on stagnant waters, and leave smoking spirals in their wake. He will sleep on mahogany floors and she will keep herself awake to admire his sleeping face. With each passing storm, they will rejoice. Time will pass as fast as Saturn’s rings. They won't look back. They will simply fade again, dreaming.
That was so great! I loved it so much!!
Overall:
I give this an 7/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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"If there was melody in silence, they were composers. Only the two of them heard its music."
Wonderful words and imagery. A beautiful poem indeed. A joy to read
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I truly appreciate the words in this poem. It was beautiful and imaginative. I could read this over and over and never get tired of it.
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Thank you for your compliment. I was really happy to read it.
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I really like your style of writing. Some very romantic notions here, too. I've actually read the poem that was your inspiration. You did the original proud. lovely.
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I'm very glad that you like it. Thank you!
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This is wondrous in it's imagination. I often wonder when reading my fellow poets ... how do they think of such things?
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I'm honored to hear that from someone who's written several thousands of poetry herself. Thank you!
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Straight out of the park..
amazing,
ive never looked at us as being falling stars..
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thanks a lot!
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this was, astounding.
wow.
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thank you very much. its parent poem was really an inspiration.
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wow true knights of the road the romance of life unfetted and unchained an excellent write dear poet
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Thank you very much!
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