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It's too Late

Chlorophyll thoughts
poison his mind,
frail and uninvited
as the virus takes hold.

Setting down the pipe
to shine through the fog
grippe and fearing
failing to recognize
his surroundings.

Four years of service
to deaden the mind
becoming an outcast
to the ones who raised him.

Overpowering
as a new life comes in
a new influence to become
as one sees fit.

A chiseled face
set in stone
breaking the ice
to undo what he has done.

As the virus takes hold
a quiet realization
falls into place
as he finds that
It's too Late.

Author notes

My brother has really gotten into smoking pot and I hate it. I mean, it's not like I've never done it, but it's over taking his life. Not even our four year old brother, when he first started, was born stopped him. It's like, if he doesn't have it everyday he's in a bitchy mood or in a depressed mood. I'm afraid THIS is what's going to happen to him, and even though we're not close or anything, I'm scared for him.

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 17
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    Wow, this was very deep
    in emotion, and very well
    expressed- your concepts.

    It must be very tough to
    bear seeing a sibling descending
    from a life once purely lived,
    but tainting himself with
    drugs.

    But always holding on to hope
    helps, and I hope one day
    soon he will end the habit.

    Lovely write

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 6

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    I... really wish I couldn't relate.

    A beautiful write, hun

    Maria


  • XneverXgoodXenoughX
    May 4

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    wow. i feel you here. everything you described is happening to me, and im slowly losing my family. you definately have a chance at becoming a finalist.


  • etoile
    April 27

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    this is so sad, and written with such great imagery. the opening stanza is very captivating and the ending is very powerful. hopefully things get better for you and your family.

    goodluck and thanks for entering

  • etoile
    April 27
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    we asked for left-alignment only in the elemental rounds contest.
    please fix this, otherwise we're going to have to DQ it.


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    April 22

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    I'm sorry about your brother.. Smoking is a truly disgusting habit no one should ever take on.. Good luck thanx for entering


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 22

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    this is a really good write and i thank you for entering it into my contest. your author notes bring it to light. i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

  • Mercury Rising
    April 18

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    A strong poem with powerful undertones and words of caution. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.

    David


  • movedon
    April 10

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    i used to do drugs. and yeah, the highs of heroine were my favorite times of my life. but the lows weren't worth the highs. this is such an awesome poem, great inspiration!! it's so hard watching someone you know and love going down that road. trust me, my family made me this huge montage video of me when i was drunk or high and while in therapy, i had to watch it. and after i saw it, i stopped all my drugs. this brought tears to my eyes


    gypsy


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 10

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    Strong poem, backing up a strong sentiment, clever and thoughtful.

    Thank you for the entry here, great work, best of luck come judgement


  • Dragonbabyx3
    April 10

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    oh sweetie!!! have you thought about asking your brother to get help? The little one really doesnt need to be around it! please find a way to get him help! I hate to see you upset and depressed like this! I love you!

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