I seek solitude for why else would I travel far into this omitting abyss?
The deluge that has taken me under with such a wrath like that of a God
Lacking forever morning’s tepid Intrusion or night's solemn embrace
Huddling like a child in a corner, desperately I abide in this delusion
Can’t decipher the right from the wrong, always in a repetitive soliloquy
I can’t find any other person here, hoping that someone would come looking
Premonition remains a nuance at my side, like a backstabbing friend
Already coming to the conclusion that future is a non-exsisting habit
a lost thought that I threw to the hungry blood craving wolves long ago
I find comfort here within arms of this massive empitiness, my mother?
I remember the elegant room, sacristy, forgotten sancuary where I told all
I remember the candlights that dimed the room, images that forebode anger
Anger in which I couldn’t keep to myself, doubtful emotions that ran wild
Forever teasing a stray soul that hangs restlessly waiting for release
Trepidation has left me far beyond wounded, caged inside fear's chasm Forever inept to the world, a child surrounded by petty materials
Belonging to the world's spawn of creativity, doubling in price, expensive
Pen being minds demise, waiting silently to acquiesce summit in surcease
Finding that souls remain immortal, whereas empty shells rot in a grave
The candescence gates of heaven refuse my admittance, casted from light
I forever found myself lingering here in the darkness, trapped tightly
In a consequence that's more like a bleak blessing, terrified of forevers
knowing of no destiny, no adventures of the unknown of the afterlife
just a lone dark soul, awaiting it's peace, a melancholy spiritless soul
Who is left wandering the dark allies for a lost subtle thought, answer?
Finding however with time, I’m not ever to find the ensconce I seek here
Just a blank paper seeking words that ring with marvolous, loud Cadence
So that it can inspire imagination with a song, that will never be sung
hower the musician looks at notes with a Shrugging, cynical expression
forever lacking the inspiration that this world once had to offer him.
Author notes
if I used a word wrong please help me. I'm doing my best to widen my vocab usage and thought this contest would help.
Abide1
Abyss1
Acquiesce1
Cadence 1
Candescence 1
Chasm 1
Consequence 1
Cynical 1
Deluge 1
Delusion 1
Destiny 1
Ensconce 1
Forebode 1
inept 1
Intrusion 1
Melancholy
Nuance 1
Premonition 1
Sacristy 1
Solemn 1
Soliloquy 1
Solitude 1
Subtle 1
Surcease 1
Tepid 1
Trepidation 1
A contest entry
- Word Bank if you Please by Little Eagle.
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Thank you for your entry
Well ensconce was use wrong. Also the poem didn't really seem to have any flow. The lines just didn't seem to reach each other. It may have been the length of them. I think you tried to cram sixty lines in thirty to fit the line limit. Good try thought. I would suggest looking up each of these words and seeing the different variations and definitions of each.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
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srry was on the phone atm when i got this. Well didn't know u could use the other forms of the words...hmm but yeah it's a bit busy. Great fun to write though later
God Bless as well
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The words were fine. The metaphors were good and the abstraction was there. Not horribly deep, but still not bad. It's always good to try something new, isn't it? I shall look forward to your new poem in my contest.
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thanks. I would've went deeper but the contest was 30 lines and I couldn't keep it any longer
. *knows now what to put in the other one XD*
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I look forward to it indeed. The depth doesn't matter as much as the abstraction does, so make it good or I'll DQ you. (just kidding)
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lol u gots it
it's hard to think up of something but I am doing my best.
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Very good. Your vocabulary was mostly accurate ( and there was one or two words you used that I had to look up). The only one I noticed is that "Candescence" should be "candescent". Good job and good luck!
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O ok I will fix that thx
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Truely a lonely little piece of expression, written wonderfully.
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aww thx X glad u liked it!
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Wow.. That made me cry.
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