The past is ressurected from beyond;
following behind, haunting me.
Memories sprinkled upon it like demon lust,
ringing true that I shall never be free.
How free then do I wish to be?
Free enough to rescue all in its grasp,
and end it for eternity?
So I will take my razor, and sharpen the blade.
I will take all of my courage, I am not afraid.
I will slice the vein on which my existance relies,
and watch the pain colored red release me from its lies.
For never again should anyone be cursed with my presence,
And all will be freed from my shadowy essence.
Author notes
No, I am not going to commit suicide. It's just something I wrote at a down point in my life.
A contest entry
- Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache by Reaper-117.
1500 points, ended May 27, 106 entries
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Very Shakespearian lass,
- How free then do I wish to be ?-
It is a dark place that this is written from.....
Great sadness............
many ghosts........
makes me want to comfort the writer...
this brought out emotions within ..
so to me it is art..
beautifuly written with depth and dispair...
leaving this world so hurt deeply saddens me....
Bless your heart little gypsy,
Liam
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Thank you very much for all of your very nice comments
It is nice when people can understand or relate to my writing.
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I know this feeling, or should I say lack of feeling, when you're so far into the darkest pit of depression that you can't see the light. Well penned. I am glad to know you this moment has now passed. Take care
Mariana
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A really powerful poem!!! I could almost see you saying this aloud. The way you write is really easy to understand, and at first I didn't know what the main subject this poem was about, but then after reading the part about sharpening your razor I kinda got the hint
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A strong write and one that is filled with the emotions that I asked for in this contest. I enjyed this poem, the only negative comment being the last line seems forced, possibly not needed at all. I know you were t rying to keep up your ryhm scheme, but I do feel the poem would have been better ended one line shorter.
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Intense! You've written some great imagery. One does not need to be suicidal to write this type of poetry. I'll like the deep emotions. Well done!
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