Sometimes moments of despair
make way for a broken heart,
it's not a time of feeling good
when your emotions fall apart.
Food is more than comfort
and you eat until your sick,
you'd stay home and sleep
that would be your daily pick.
Everything seems hopeless
and you just want to cry,
ready to give up on life
you think you want to die.
You feel alone inside yourself
and don't know what to do,
you feel as if you have no life
and you hope for something new.
Your thoughts are really raging
inside your aching head,
you don't have a single care
about what anybody else has said.
You don't want to do anything
but watch television all day long,
when you are out in public
you feel as if you don't belong.
In a way you've given up
on the person you could be,
you stay inside a comfort zone
and keep yourself from being free.
Author notes
This poem shows how I feel. Though it's written like I'm putting somebody else in my shoes.
A contest entry
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Comments
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"Your thoughts are really raging
inside your aching head,
you don't have a single care
about what anybody else has said.
You don't want to do anything
but watch television all day long,
when you are out in public
you feel as if you don't belong."
That was my favorite part. I know how you feel and im so glad that you entered this in my contest, good luck and best wishes
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You've written this very well. You've managed to tell the story with emotion and feeling and keep it to a good rhyme and flow.
This feeling is well known to me - it comes along more often than I am comfortable with that's for sure. I hope you are able to get through the despair and come out the other side smiling
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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