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It's not fair

swinging high
touching the sky
(flying)
landing quickly
my head spins
these little pick-me-ups
make me see
above and beyond everyone
in the distance I see the ocean
its waves creating angry emotion
I must go on or be damned


the little kid inside me screams
"it's not fair!"

Author notes

prompt : "devastation survival guide"

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A contest entry

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  • Judith Chandler
    April 14
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    "waves creating angry emotion" - I like that.

    Enjoyed your write.


  • sheltered
    April 9
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    you got it


  • The Reapers Angel
    April 8

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    This is so prettyful, wonderful, and inspirational.
    Love the last line, thank you for entering my contest.
    ~Angel


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 8

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    It's never fair, it just is. Sometimes we have control and yet others we don't. To find the balance and just roam in the key and yet at times the fear is to great. We must breathe and yet our chest remains flat as our spirit moves without us. Great piece Kari


  • JinSays gold member
    April 8

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    Oh, I really love this one.
    I love the rush of words, like you've been holding them inside your mouth, waiting to exhale.
    Fabulous.
    Love,
    jin


  • maralisa silver member
    April 8

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    aw a wonderful write so full depth throughout good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • pd11
    April 8

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    Neat one...
    nice imagery... and i totally like the way it suggests the hearts desire to do something great..
    i am not sure if that was intended, but thats what i took from this.
    best of luck with the contest..

  • Thor-201
    April 8

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    Wonderful job here, well done. I love the way you minimized the last line. "it's not fair!" Very effective.


  • FaeRae gold member
    April 8
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    For one so young, you have such a talent.
    -Rae


    • Kari gold member
      April 8
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      actually I'm 27 but when I saw the prompt it just jumped out like that to me...thanks for your compliment


  • Katilina
    April 8

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    awesome

    Reminds me of my flying dreams. You have a cute little write here. I know we have to grow up, but I never want to lose my innocence of heart completely.


    • Kari gold member
      April 8
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      Yeah, I'm 27 so I know exactly what you're saying

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