Day after day
You asked me if you could
All you wanted was a chance
To kiss my lips
Every time you asked
I denied you permission
Things must go slowly
Like down syndrome snails
Two months together
Sneaking out at 2am
You turned my head
Whispered the request
Once more I told you no
Too soon to move forward
Your adorable pouting face
Made me grant you my cheek
Outside the house we sit
I'm on your lap, you ask again
It's your birthday
Why won't I give you this gift
I look you in the eyes
And say not just yet
I want to wait more
So that it's special
That same night we walk
To the park on the corner
You're so anxious for a yes
We lay on the jungle gym
Looking up into the stars
I smile while you hold me
Before you see it coming
My lips lock onto yours
Both of our very first kisses
Just as innocent as the playground
Laughing and kissing, we roll
Under the dim desert stars
Your face glowing bright
From the light of streetlamps
You thank me quietly
Kisses speak my next words
Hands locked together
We walk light-heartedly
Stopping every few steps
To relive our happiest moment
Again and again
Author notes
e x p l a i n . e v e r y t h i n g
Kayla Stowell, 16
two: love poems.
A contest entry
- The First Times by brokenknuckles.
573 points, ended April 21, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
Comments
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T3fs is a very beautifkl poem. The imagery and the plot line to this carelfully constructed dedication to love was constructed beautifully.
Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering, and forever have an open and loving heart. Take your time, but don't wait too long.
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Liked it
This was very sweet. I remember my first kiss it was not as special though. Thank you for sharing. Not exactly what I'm looking for but good luck. -
very intresting story... i like it, its very honest and sweet.. thanks for entering..
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very good.. it was meaningful and told of a very happy moment with someone so special
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A beautiful piece... I don't even remember my first kiss. It would have been nice to have a memory like this one. Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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Simple and effective
well done.
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Awe that is so sweet I think love makes great poetry.
The Positives:
this was full of sweet emotions
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Looking up into the stars
I smile while you hold me
Before you see it coming
My lips lock onto yours
Both of our very first kisses
Just as innocent as the playground
Laughing and kissing, we roll
Under the dim desert stars
that is so very very sweet
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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ohhh. this made my heart burst into happiness.
thank you thank you thank you.
i wish i could give this a gold trophy already.
wowza. (:
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im really glad you like it so much! =]
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Very nice memory of a first kiss...thank you for entering.....novy
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GREAT!! =-D
This is a winner!!
Yes, the imagery is fantastic...love it!! The innocence is refreshing. -
Wow.
very nice.
Great imagery, and the way you described the littlest moments was just stellar.
Hands locked together
We walk light-heartedly
Stopping every few steps
To relive our happiest moment
I love that stanza bc you described kissng without useing the actual word.
It was very well done.
good Luck on the contest.
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im really glad you like it, thanks for the comment. =]
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