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Sometimes

Sometimes,
I look in the mirror and see clearly,
Or what I think is clear,
But how can I know truth?
Especially from my own lies

Sometimes,
Looking at you and who we used to be,
How I used to feel,
All the time,
Still a small seed of doubt,
Was always planted,
And it just kept growing,
Into a shadowy tree of deceit,
Blocking out the sun

Sometimes,
Looking at him,
The sunlight still shines through,
And I don’t know,
What I should do about it

Sometimes,
As much as I say things everyday,
My mind won’t back me up,
Or rather,
My mind does,
But does my heart,
For in doing this,
Can it even be said I have one?

Sometimes,
My mind has power,
So still I stay here,
But still,
I don’t know anything anymore,

Sometimes,
I’m happy and sad,
Tears and smiles intertwined,
Because you aren’t the one,
Bringing joy and laughter,

And,
Sometimes,
I’m not even sure if I love you anymore….
Or if I have for a long time…

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Tyler likes to bake cake

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  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    April 19

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    the repitition in this poem really sets it apart. i really like what you have done with it. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Sweetest-sounds
    April 9
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    :(

    awe sam!


  • Fire-Fly
    April 8

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    This makes me sad as I read it

    It's written nicely, it flows well, I like the 'sometimes' threading through the poem and the way you've set out the poem makes you read it in a certain way that encourages pauses and breaks which give it meaning.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.