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Comfort

Silky soft petals
Curl in scented luxury
Tomorrow awaits
So different to today
Will the memory remain

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Just a Tanka

A contest entry

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  • Lyndon gold member
    April 28

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    Thank you for your verse

    I do think punctuation of each line end would have helped in poetic communication.
    The memory of birth, of course, never remains that we know of.
    Again, thank you for the entry.