In the subtle darkness
of the mind a solemn vow is made.
To be rid of all the melancholy
nonsense that has made itself home.
As well as the cynical thoughts that appear
out of the abyss like a desert oasis.
Though the consequence for ignoring premonition is great
pressing on in order to create a different destiny
is the only to stop being such a nuisance on the world
and escape from solitude.
Author notes
Abyss,subtle,solemn,melancholy, cynical, consequence,premonition,destiny, solitude, nuisance.
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Comments
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Thank you for your entry
Firstly, you misspelled melancholy. Secondly in this line:
"is the only to stop being such a nuance on the world"
I believe you meant nusance, nuance is a totally different meaning and doesn't fit the line you have it in.
Other wise well done. Nice flow and structure.
I encourage you to keep writing, to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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