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Kyoto

dusted tranquility
coarse and antiquated
tired and restless souls
quaint reminders
fallen idols remain

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  • Draig aine gold member
    May 1

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    what a wonderful take

    al that is old is new once more reborn, fallen idols still remain in modernized form this is a very soulful tanka
    thanks you for submitting this.


  • yukitosumi
    April 9

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    Reminds me of a stroll in the Met museum. My short attention span had me distracted by the capitals at the beginning of each line, but it's certainly not something I would penalize you for. I'm glad I waited for you!


    • SouthpawGA
      April 9
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      Struggle

      I always struggle with the issue of Caps at the beginning of each line.... I've gotten so used to doing it, that sometimes I have to be reminded they get in the way sometimes... thanks for the kind words, and for letting me join at such a late hour.