I hated you ...
(Almost as much as this damn cigarette, I think).
You took them away from me
and now you lie there surrounded by tokens.
Signs of exactly how much of a whore you are.
(See in the end I do take after you.)
So I will take another drag of this filthy fag
lazily burning out between my legs.
I will remember your moments of glory
surrounded by cock.
(I never thought I would see that glazed look of lust).
I will write you a eulogy fitting for a slut
that took anything they offered, yet still begged for more.
It could be the drugs you were given,
maybe your fag was also rife
with the essence that would later cost your life.
Maybe, I can only guess at his intentions,
I can only wonder how many times my body
will please him and his evil horde.
Maybe I will smoke a little more,
I do not relish the idea of that knife
marking this body with each new thrust.
I loved watching you fade into numb shock
as orgasm mixed with pain, with the knowing
that this so-called prayer for reconciliation
was for your return to dust.
I guess this high is worth it,
the pain I felt from you was too.
We will be together soon.
I loved you too mommy ...
Author notes
This is for the erotic challenge. My task was to take a photo and write a dark write of no more than 30 lines. I do not normally do dark writes so this is new to me. Hope it worked out well since this is probably not something I will do again soon.
It was different though ...
The picture link is:
http://dockera.com/pics/erotic/2smoking.jpg
The link to the challenge is:
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2351111
Please tell me what you think
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This is certainly dark with a hint of being erotic. I do think that this could have been a bit more towards the erotic side of things though.
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Mistress Rose
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As a dark write this is disturbingly enjoyable. Whilst for me it is not erotic I do love the spine chilling dark writes which this is. The closing line leaves the reader shuddering.
Well done
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Jem
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WOW..
I believe this is very dark. You ahve truely captured this picture and made it your own.
Once again you are at the top of your game when it comes to my challenges...
As for this entry there is nothing to critique here as you have risen to the challenge and beyond.
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I think you grabbed the essence of the picture, brought it too life and did exactly what you were challenged to do. Impressive.
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very creative and full of emotions, a last farewell, and a gruesome epitaph...dark indeed, the human mind has winding caverns... i enjoyed... PK
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