Without you,
The world's sunshine,
The living's oxygen,
The earth's soil,
The beginning of eternity,
There will be no me
Without you,
My beating heart,
My endless time,
My present and future,
My never-ending horizon,
Believe me, I am nothing
Without you,
Our morning sunflower,
Our evening star,
Our shining moonlight,
Our twinkling diamond,
The world is nothing.
Allow me to ask you
Without you, where would I be?
Author notes
Written March 4th, 2004
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Beautiful. This made me think of my boyfriend, who said something like this to me before. I think you put the feeling and words together nicely. I especially liked these 2 verses where you said 'without you,
my beating heart,
my endless time,
my present and future,
my neverending horizon,
believe me, i am nothing'.
Once again great job. Later, Sunny.
without you,
our morning sunflower,
our evening star,
our shining moonlight,
our twinkling diamond,
the world is nothing.
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Nice job. Very nice job! I think you did an excellent job on this one. You seem to have a real nick for the writing game. If you go to poetry.com, you can sign up for publication contests under your own copyright. I have had 4 published and two put on a poetry cd. You could do it, and I urge you to keep writing.
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Really really good, loved everything about this, was just so beautiful.
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Wow, that's a very good poem. It kinda of reminds me of a song. It a perfect thing to give to your boyfriend, husband, person you have a crush on, and etc. Keep up the good work, I liked it very much.
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