Slipping under
(Are you?) slipping under
Hear me
(Do you?) hear me
Breathe again
(When will you?) breathe again
Honestly, you say, I'm gonna be okay
But your voice is shaking, angel
Your face, it's gone all gray
The worst could always happen
Yeah, your life could slip away
An almost fatal scare
Leaves us with fears
A scar to prove you're fragile
Slipping under
(Are you?) slipping under
Hear me
(Do you?) hear me
Breathe again
(When will you?) breathe again
This world is scary, so scary
And you're a victim
A victim of a disease, deadly
In your head, in your head
Your disease reproduces
An almost fatal scare
Leaves us with fears
A scar to prove you're fragile
Slipping under
(Are you?) slipping under
Hear me
(Do you?) hear me
Breathe again
(When will you?) breathe again
Fears, scares, scars, your disease it reproduces
Author notes
Best with Rock music!
A contest entry
- ARE U A ROCK STAR?! - PROVE IT! by cgirl0410.
650 points, ended April 23, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Specifically interesting
I enjoy this piece greatly. It has powerful imagery and a good flow to it. One suggestion that I would make; clarify what the words in brackets mean. I've seen them mean background screaming, an echo, a whisper, etc. I would just like to read this correctly
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fantastic
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I like this. I also could heart music in my head as I was reading.
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OMG! THIS ROCKED! An amazing flow, I could even hear the music in my head with this piece. Hands down amazing, AWESOME! Thanx 4 entering. ROCK ON! - cgirl0410
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take a breat jade - and breathe
so... did you like my soing the bar;s polished disgiuse? an old one based aroud marillion.
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Yep, very good.
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