I Am
Winner come lately
Wiping off the mud
From so many falls in the dirt
I Am
A writer
reflecting back the world as I see it
In universal truths
I Am
A lover
Freed by the fires of love
That burn the pages of my past
I Am
Forgiveness
Freeing the chains of hate and anger
That had me trapped in this shell
I am Warrior
Spirit
Lover
I Am
A contest entry
- I am... by Desdmona.
800 points, ended April 21, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you honestly think?
Comments
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I really like this! I can never write about myself, but you did very well! Original and probably true (:
Keep writing
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!! My eyes....hahah.... I like this but I think you can do a little more to bring out some originality. I think if you use more metaphors to represent what you are instead of telling us what you are it will make this a bit more complex and add some layers of meaning to the complexity of your soul.
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This is pretty and sweet. It reminds me of my friend Mike. You sound a lot like him. This is very good and honest. I like it. Good job and good luck! ~Des
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Good-day to ye an’ all me dooties to ye. If ye asks me ye have ye’self a right grande piece of litteryture ‘ere. I’ll gamble ye be right proud. Ye can ‘ave me balls for breakfas’ if this not be a good grande poem.
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Are You Now or Will You Have Ever Been Then?
The world as you see it
Is unicursal - universal
Comes not into It, at All.
I see then One
A Lover become
Delusionary airy fairy
May king making merry
Distributing very heavy
Links of what he thinks
Is forgiveness, for giveness,
His warrior spirit loveliness.
A pretty good poem I guess.
But I am left to guess, unless...
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honestly
it is a very strong write for this stanza alone would i applaud your words
I Am
A lover
Freed by the fires of love
That burn the pages of my past
I wish I had written them Grin!
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Thank you for your kind words.
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But Wouldst He Urn A Knighthood?
I just don't think one is ever freed from the past, especially if the truths propounded are universal, as an earlier stanza claims.
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I respectfully disagree with you comment on I Am. Lessons learned from the past can make you stronger, and more sensitive to trials and mistakes others go through, also less quick to judge. Besides, no one needs someone in their life who can not judge them where they are, and not where they were. I feel that anyone who can overcome serious mistakes and live a good, giving life is definitely a warrior
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Live & Let Leave, Without Being AWOL
Well, for me, fighting with my head lead only to headaches.
Until I became Enlightened (in the classic Buddhist sense, if not by the classic Buddhist path, to classic Buddhist ends), all my Intellectual Warrior atttempts at learning, which I would not be spurning, were more by way of training for that day when I began to see clearly what was really for Me, and what was for other men, or women.
My own sense of self-respect came easily to me. That you may have to pass on through more trial and tribulation than I do in that respect, to retain Innocence (which means literally "to be unhurt" - and do we not all heal?) with your Experience perhaps suggests a different sense of values, allocations of priorities, one's which make it harder to feel Innocent (eg. casting one's self-identity in light of what others think of you, which I could never do, thanks to experiences I had passed through in infancy, which I won't go into) and thus require you to fight more to love your spirit.
I do like the idea of being "a lover and a fighter", rather than either/or.
For my money, it is not so much the Judgement as the Execution that one were best to avoid being quick with.
That is enough to say for me for now.
Thank you for the invitation to discuss something: lately I have had too many people who can't seem to take any critique without losing their place in the -que, and creating an -ism like a schism instead.
Master Anarchy
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grin perhaps knighthood
and I hope you are incorrect about sins of the past, karma carries us onward and hopefully upward -
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The Word of Sin is Restriction
Dear Sir, or though be an Lady:
I don't know about sins - they say Sin was a Babylonian God of Urban Cultivation, and his Word was Restriction. And as for Karma, per Austin Osman Spare, the Karma of a Cat is to be chased by Dogs; the Karma of a Wheel is to Turn. But it certainly seems the Karma of Poetry is either as Books To Burn Midnight Oil By, Be Lit Up by the Sun, or Electrify Total I, Virtu'ly.
In an Infinite Universe, which way is up?
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a woman yes
hm a lady, well not always grin
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This is a really strong poem, the short lines, and clear cut language arevery effective, its a very memorable piece, bravo, nice write indeed
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Thank you. I appreciate the kudos.
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Well what more can be said.
absolutly loved this write, and if this is the tyoe of person you are in heart i give my salutes and compliments to all who are part of your life.
well done and all the best
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I try my best, but sometimes fall short. Above all, I try to live with love. Thanks for the very nice remarks.
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A very powerful write, great word choices and imagery.
"I am Warrior
Spirit
Lover
I Am"
LOVED LOVED LOVED the ending!
Good luck in the contest.
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I'm glad you liked it
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Wow. Full of so many images, and so vivid! I loved it. Short and very powerful. Andrew Houtman? Are you Dutch? Or South African? It's a very Afrikaans surname. (not insulting you, I am from South Africa, just curious) anyways, great write. Thanx for sharing.
Catacomb.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. Actually, I'm German. And no insult taken, I am fascinated that the name is African, I didn't know that.
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Applause-Applause-Applause!
Now..this is a bold write!
one deserving of you and your ink.
Lyrical writer....bass beat...and damn
if I don't hear a screaming saxaphone!
well done!
ears/Seattle
will feature immediately!
Gluttons for Punishment
salute you!
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Thank you so much, and thank you for being so supportive. That means a lot to me. I am glad you like the poem.
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This was beautiful!!
Really well written.
I truly liked this and how it flowed.
Very creative.
Thank you very much for sharing.
Take care
Love Peace
campanaro
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This is very good.
"I Am
A lover
Freed by the fires of love
That burn the pages of my past" is my favourite part. Very nicely written.
Thanks for comenting my poems.
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God, this is well-done!! After reading your author's page first...and then coming in and reading this: It was a beautiful add-on to what that page had to say. I loved the "freed by the fires of love" line.....something about fire just moves me, so I am always taken by the mention of it. Excellent writing!
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great
this is wonderful i really enjoyed readin it. theres just something there. it has a certain charm. keep up the good work.
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