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Schism

The universe buckles under the weight
Of liability of the wretchedness which it spawns,
Severing body from spirit
And heart from mind.

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  • KittyPaq
    April 23
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    Wow.
    This is possibly the shortest poem I have been able to say that simply astounds me.


  • ItaloEtkin
    April 8
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    wow... this is great. fantastic use of words and the last two lines are stellar.