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March, 2009

her lips are a mystery,
but I’d die for a taste
or simply to linger there;
undiscovered.



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  • Rembrandt Clarke
    April 29
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    great undertone. i'd lose the puncuation tho, sort of clutters.


  • Jesann gold member
    April 23

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    Beautiful.
    A feel of daydream thoughts...
    or silent observation.
    Loved it.
    Good to see you back.


  • tara wilson gold member
    April 18
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    this is really beautiful. short and very sweet. leaves a lingering kiss feel to it.


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 18
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    Nice effort Joe! Liked this a lot!


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    April 15

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    Joe is in the house! Hey! Long time no! Beautiful write, beautiful, so good to read you again. How are you? Are you back?


  • chilali
    April 15

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    This is new!!! Yay! You still write. I love this Joe! Bravo!!!


  • decode
    April 13
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    ooh.


  • chloris
    April 10
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    ahem! write on brava!!!

  • wellbegone
    April 7
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    Nicely penned

    I'm not so sure longing is a good place to be..


  • divebar
    April 7
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  • Mariana gold member
    April 7

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    Great to see you are writing again Joe. This is lovely, full of longing.

    Mariana  

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