I lament to tell you of my becoming unearthed
With starlight in my hair,
And the moon the mirror to my being-it is a riddle
The absent noise in human worry
That can be felt for years by the wrinkling of a brow
An irrational fear in the change of lips, of closing eyes
The subtle insanity of self
I sought beauty, perfection
Only such eyes as mine could vision
My heart longed for threads of warmth,
The slight touch of finger tips to skin, the mingle of breath
As hot as the sun I’ve but dreamed to eclipse…
Hands bending, twitching unsure
As silence descends into paragraphs of movements,
It was something I refused to understand
Those change of lips, of closing eyes, a world too full
A world now empty
The noise of belief drowned me in my mold,
Liquid fire that burned even to places I’ve never known
It was a room without corners,
No corners in which to hide, to conceal
What I’ve done to myself
I want to be spring again.
But when you seek freedom too fiercely
When you drag, rip, and break yourself far
From the mud of ache, from the dirt of strife
You are left looking at the dawn
Knowing the sun shall never come
It is here I lament; it is here I stand,
Snatched.
Author notes
Prompt from the Song, Lightning Crashes by Live:
"The angel opens her eyes (Her eyes, her eyes)
Pale blue coloured iris, presents the circle
Puts the glory out to hide, hide"
A contest entry
- "lightning crash" by JinSays.
906 points, ended April 17, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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that is a beautiful song prompt and this poem is equally as strong... well done.. congrats on the gold
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Intensely powerful, emotionally adept, pitch is flawless.
I think this poem snuck itself into this contest and stolen the show.
I am a little surprised nobody has commented on this piece.
As a whole, it's just stunning, and even pieced as a chronology, it speaks volumes. I think you've done it-you've captured that feeling I have when I hear this song.
Excellent work, thank you.
Love,
jin
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Thank you for hosting the contest, the song was a fun prompt to work from. It lead me here and it sure was an adventure to write. Thanks so much again I'm glad you liked it.
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