I could feel the tears goin down my face
The pain rushing thru me all at once
I was speachless
How could you do this to me?
Why make a promise if you cant keep one?
Here I was thinking you were honest someone I could count on But I should of seen it coming when you lied the first time
I should of known you could not keep my secret
Now evry one noes and they pass on the word call me all kinds of names make me feel like someone Im not I wish you were sorry!
What did you think?
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straightforeward and sad.
huff.. =\
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I think the spelling errors add and don't take away...this poem feels high-schooly to me so I would actually put more of the "text typing" in the poem. I would like to see a little more flow to it but its a really good concept and good start!!
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Few speeling errors but no biggy.
This piece is full of emotion
You have discriped the feelins very well and i found my self feeling these emotions as i read.
I can imagine puting my self in this persons shoes. By the way you have written this piece i felt i was this person
It was good! i really liked it
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