The world is crashing down around us
You're all that's on my mind
The world is crashing down around us
And I'm the farthest from your mind
I will never forget you, I promise
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Word Count: 34
A contest entry
- 35 words to make me feel something. by Beautiful Irony.
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Comments
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i think this has a tragic tone to it. Almost like you love them but they don't love you. Could be reading to much into it though.
The Positives:
Short but packed with eomotion and really cathy lines love it
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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i liked this becuase it was blunt to the point yet held hidden meaning; thanks for entering
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