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Lunatics Denial (A Scream in Five Parts)

I.
I think that
I loved her.

So I let her go.



She could never remain transfixed.
Unmoving, controlled.







II.
[Narrator: The loudspeaker blares, drowning out that sad, sad folk tune, covering those melancholy scars with tattoos and British colours and initials...LSD...PCP...RIP...)]

~When the world, yeah the whole fucking world man is ALIVE!
Moving forward and backward and sideways through parallels unrestrained by petty complaints untainted by the food poisoning leaking into our government issued minds~

{{Never looking back}}

No time time time time time time time time time time time time time time NO TIME!
(to wander or compose or to exist in infamy...)

JustplainwhiteSPEEDspeedSPEEDspeedSPEEDspeedSPEEDspeedSPEED!!!!!

[Nameless:]~Did you know the world never stops, eh?
[Nameless:]~Man, I'm a gonna be somebody!
[Shameless:]~Get out of this shit pool and fly on the back of Lucy, to the Eastern Land of Bangeleshi Capitalism...

Posture and pose,
Roll and inject
Yeah man, far out man, tune out man, drop out man, BE IN MAN!

Or else you're just a stuck up poser Danielle...too square to round my curves...

(so warm, so soft)

Luna  

(Fucking return my book, why don’t you?)


[Narrator: As her voice fades through the loudspeaker, we resume the faux angst ridden journey of our hapless protagonist]






III.
Hare Krishna my arse.







IV.
I think that
I loved her.

So I let her go.

She don't hate me.

No.

Yet, she doesn't recognize me neither.

At least rage is an emotion, panting blood from its cuticles, impassioned and infected

---
Now she lives a blank-canvas sort of life.
Not the kind where you draw out inspiration.
The sort where you stare and pretend and float in suspended...
failure.
A circumcised sort of life,
of pleasure.
Fly high Andrea, hooked on soma and L-O-V-E...fly high

above.







V.
I think that
I loved her.

So I let her be.

(Do I regret that painting?)

At least if I betrayed her.

She may have felt something towards



me.

 

Author notes

Um, well, my mind diarreha was acting up and I scooped up the scraps, sort of to try and make clear the pitfalls of puppylust now lost...

It's all true, so if you 'know' me and start making, I don't know, connections, all the better in my opinion...

I'd rather she find out through my art than my blubbering speech...

But no one reads this shit that could possibly fanthom the implications, so voila!

Check me on my grammar and be with cha...jk

~Hippie

*for contest: latest poem*

A contest entry

this is more of a demented diary than a full fleshed POEM...but, review...;)

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Comments


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11

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    I like the format you have presented, and I like the emotion this invokes, well written.


    whisper


  • k8fairy
    May 20

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    If this is what your diary entries are like you should freaking publish your diary! I love the vibrancy of this! It is like reading the movie "across the universe" only it has a good story line, one where you connect to the people. The people in part 2 I have totally meet!

    I particularly enjoy the antropomorphism of rage. I want to read more, when you publish your diary tell me and I'll purchase a copy. Make sure you art the pages up to match the poem/diary entries, it'll sell!

    I didn't get part 3 as much though I totally agree with it.

    I wish I could write with the same sort of vibrancy as you do. You're amazing.

    • Thank you so muchly!
      k8, you have amazing vibrancy! The vivid spectrums of thought presented in your poetry are almost therupeutic to unravel and the wit and images presented are beyond the limits of "hip"...they're happening! *okay, that was lame poser ghetto, anywho...*


      Um, part two...is me and this chicka...*my name is danielle by the way, I'm talking to myself, *

      Part three is a reference to the beatles, which is in turn a reference to Luna, which is in turn a highly snobbish smack between me and Georgie Harrison and the composer of hair...

      You are too kind k8...someday, perhaps, I'll publish my mind poos...once I stop being lazy, I'll start a deviant art or something and present all my rainbow penis doodles

      ~hippie