The dreams left behind closed eyes
never to be spoken of.
The good, the bad, the worst just stays bound inside the mind.
The dreams blessed with love and happiness never is spoke of.
The dreams dark and depressing tortures the mind.
The dreams of the future leave you wondering yet in doubt.
The dreams of the past leaves shrills down your spine.
The dreams of past loved ones always brings sadness of the loss.
The dreams of birth leave hope for a brighter tomorrow.
The dreams of death puts fear in your head.
The dreams can never be spoken of.
They must rest in the mind forever.
Some dreams are better left behind closed doors, behind closed eyes.
A contest entry
- Quote Contest to honnor my first year by word20dragon.
400 points, ended May 2, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful imagery of dreams and the emotions are raw and beautiful as well. Keep on writing!
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Great images here
I get nice clear vivid pictures in my mind when I read this and it spoke to me.
I got busy in a drawing project and I am so sorry for not reponding sooner and letting the contest laps.
Please forgive me it wont happen again I will keep better track of time.
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stylistically you choose a very difficult form. It is hard to make each line so tight and diamond brilliant to keep your readers enthralled and expanding their awarness.
It is an interesting, but debatable slant you have put forth about dreams. I invest in them. They often guide my sense of wonder for the morrow.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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I like the concept that dreams "must rest in the mind forever." Cool. I like the repetition, but the grammar mistakes got in the way for me (watch your singular/plural sentence construction, especially). Good job, and thanks for posting.
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I like it because it speaks some truth about dreams, and is not all-darkness or all-happiness. It's a good mix. Nice poem
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Dark, while at the same time appealing to the child in the reader. Hopeful without being fantasty-ish. Very nice job with repetition ^-^.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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