Somethings we do to feel relief
I do it to relive my grief
My ribs are bloody
My hands, they were cutting
Cutting the flesh below my breast
I tried to stop
But my hand kept going
Wanting my blood to keep flowing
I wanted death
That eternal rest
I envy those that have that oportunity
Because i'm not even worthy of death
I'm so low, i'm lower the the earth
Wishing for my birth
My mother wanted a daughter
So she can dress up in pretty dresses and put ribbons in her hair
But instead she got me
I should be dead, why? Because of the pain i cause
Don't you see?
All the pain and misery
It all comes from me
I cause it all so i must die
Yet my mother wants me
Loves me
How could she?!
Love me, someone who caused so much pain
A contest entry
- Lost Poems. (Poems That Have Not Been Commented) by HereComesTheSun.
700 points, ended April 25, 88 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
.... don't care, just say it sucks and get it over with.
Comments
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this is just one among a list of many beautiful poems youve written!!! the ryme scheme worked well, because amazingly i didnt want to throw my laptop out the window when i read it! anyway, Great job!!!!!!
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full of emotion with vivid imagery, this paints a picture of a child crying out for attention even knowing how loved they are. thank you for sharing this deeply emotional poem. keep writing poet! God bless you always
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you definitely have a way with words my dear. Although I don't understand why you think that you cause pain and that is all that you do. That just is not true my dear. You are a person not unlike the rest of us. And your mother is right to love you. I think a lot of us would love you if you give us a chance. You write wonderfully dear. Yes, you are an emotional writer but truly I like that kind of writings.
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Positive: you do an amazing job with emotion and how well you express it, you have a stellar ability at that.
Negative: when it comes to rhyme alot of them sound the same. my suggestion is when you do rhyming work to go online to a rhyming website and find words unique, it helps your piece stand out
thanks for entering
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