dear song
i've come to that place
we spoke of
where time is nothing and -
less
life shatters as easy as
it gives
it goes
so many had a rainy day today
maybe it's their last
i would know...
if knowing meant i could
give a second chance
it's not about falling
when you're standing still
& crashing doesn't scare you-
until the blood is real
until your knees buckle
from under
you
dear empathy
envelop my development
send me on my way
i see not what you are
but what you aren't for me
release me, labeled unchanged
i don't mind the blame
but i can't go on knowing-
knowing doesn't mean a thing
he was so beautiful
when he was painfully drunk
i'd never heard the truth
packed with such a punch
he knocked me out
& i wish i could've stood
the stench-
a little more than i did
brutal love bends for none
and stabs you in the dark
one heart is not enough
to bring about a spark-
bright enough to shine
even when it rains
even as we cry
dear solidarity
envelop my development
send me on my way
i see not what you are
but what you aren't for me
release me, labeled unclaimed
i don't mind the shame
but i can't go on knowing-
knowing didn't change a thing
i still cried
they still die
he still lies
and i still cry
still, even as i write
even as the melody becomes
white
even as the melody becomes
right.....
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ps. i really liked the rhythm this had.
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w-o-w/ this was amazing. i almost want to burst into tears. it is filled with such sorrow. i send you hugs
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I could have sworn I commented on this last time I read it. why'd you delete my comment?
anyway, this is a different voice for you as far as I can tell. have you been doing extra credit on the side? nice tragedy you portray here. I question the rhyme in this. the few stanzas that rhyme don't seem to fit (in that they rhyme, not in content).
good to see you writing even though I can't! lol
hope you're still around here!
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a beauiful heartfelt song that tugs at the heart, the soul and mind...introspective, sad, spiritual...Amazing!
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a voice emerges here for me, to talk...say a poetic song, a dance of heavy hearted sadness; wonder why feelings can be so overwhelming, at the wrong times... why didnt we spend more time, offer a hand to hold, a kind word ...so many passed chances until all are gone, and we are left with words that seem empty, and spirits that hang heavy...beautiful words here...PK
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there's a strength inside people
you can notice it when they become disappointed in others
those who have nothing inside crumble
they still search for the cozy warmth of a mother
who’s fault is that they’re so empty they can’t stand other’s failure?
Is that love? the complete annihilation of self at the expense of beauty?
I don’t even know why people try to invent weapons anymore…
maybe because they’re so scared of the chicken inside.
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you leave the greatest comments!! thanks,
blu
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