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The Wild Ones Dance

Beneath the branches, shadows darken
to me, children, you must harken
'Tis not a night to wander, no
for in the dark, the wild things know
It's the night of the Masquerade.

The wolf prowled out this hot spring night
and he prayed to the moon to give him light
With a flick of his ears, a twitch of his tail
he followed the haunted music's trail
to the place of the Masquerade.

The creatures, great and small they came
in masked costumes, not two the same
and under the pale cool moon they danced
beneath a canopy of stars they pranced
on the night of the Masquerade.

The fox in red did bare his claws
and reached for his vixen's silky paws
The black wolves howls wailed and rose
to join the music's frantic throes
as they danced in the Masquerade.

And child, here in safety sleep
protected from all things that creep
that slink, that pounce, with fang and claw
Safe there, but you will dream in awe
dreams of the Masquerade.

The night beasts' Masquerade.

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  • lifelines
    November 9
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    thisis so cool. i love your style of writing its so interesting. thewm words you use just pull people in. great job!


  • mcope8050
    November 7
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    wonderfully written

    conveyed brilliantly was the story of this Masquerade,,, a wonderful journy,,, enjoyed be me as well as others I am sure,,, thanks for sharing this with the rest of us here on allpoetry,,,


  • tamajinn
    September 21

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    Magical

    Loved it so much, reminded me of "Goblin's Market" and "Labyrinth" and dark fairy tales. Would love to see an art print of the picture you paint. Spooky but wonderful at the same time, we are not afraid of the "night beasts" but long to join them, or at least spy on them through tangled branches.

    In the third stanza, I read the word "masked" as two syllables as if an accent over the second syllable, seemed to help the rhythm.

    Thank you for this lovely gift! Ten claps!


  • Wyakin
    September 17

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    LOVELY. I loved this piece
    Wyakin


  • Mellindrae
    August 19

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    awesome. I loved this...truly excellent, with beautiful imagery. I could almost see the animals dancing 'round, hear the pounding music with the howling wolves' accompaniment.


  • Behemoth-King
    August 14

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    I absolutely love the rhyme you've managed to spin out it just causes the poem to flow so beautifully and really adds power and impression to the word choice

    "The black wolves howls wailed and rose
    to join the music's frantic throes"

    Wonderfully done

  • a u r a
    August 14

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    this is really good-I enjoyed reading this piece- it has it's onw rhythm and beat- I see great talent here


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 14

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    Love the story told in excellent rhyme and flow and I (almost) always adore a developing refrain.

    An old fashioned folk beat, this would work well sung to a fiddle

    Great stuff

    Jeff


  • fluxus
    August 14
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    hm.. feel like i want to know what happens next!


  • cjgreene
    August 9
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    I must say...this made me smile. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Painted a magical picture. Good job.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 8

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    wow this is just amazing! I love it!!!!! Keep up your amazing work!!! Congratulations on the gold trophy! It was well deserved.

    TwiztidMaggot


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 22

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    You did a splendid job in this. Nice rhyming structure from start to finish. Fitting for you to earn a gold trophy. THANKS AGAIN!


  • moaner
    April 15

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    oh wow, his is FANTASTIC! i even dragged down my boyfriend from upstairs to read this and he HATES poetry! he thought it was AWESOME! in his own words. i wish i could write as well as you, that way he'd read my stuff haha truly fantastic though, i wouldnt want to change an ounce of this. A*********


  • queenie
    April 13

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    this is good, no this is great. i love the archai feel of it. it's gives you a feel of participating in the event of the year surrounded by kings, queens, and peasants alike. makes you want to go dancing. the rhymes are the best.


  • Grozny silver member
    April 13
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    Very good!

    I wouldn't have thought of having animals at the masquerade, but the imagery was excellent.


  • Great write its very "where the wild things are" your rhyme and meter are flawless. Great job all around

  • I enjoyed this one.

    Very well done.

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