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American Vanity.

Emaciated dummys
Wearing mISmaTcHed socks
Thinking they're rebelling
  [Because Mummy rolls them into pairs.]

Wearing string vests
To show the m/a/r/k/s on their arms
Where they accidently misplaced their razors.

Jealous s.h.a.gging in gardens
The idea of being seen...
The thrill of the
c h a s e ...

Will Daddy find out about his dirty little princess?

 

First party.

Prom? Playing dress-up in white frocks

P*r*e*t*t*y colours,

All over the carpet,

           and in the the sink,

                     and in your hair....

Alcohol.

Posers posing
With laces hanging out...
Glitter covered blackness
And pretty profanity.

[Hides] an attitude they don't really have

     {and are too afraid to use anyway.}

Discarding their report cards,
Daddy wanted an A.
He gets one.
Followed by R.S.E.H.O.L
and E.

Fights, falling, screaming, nail varnish, make up, biTching,
yelling, 't,e`a,r's,
hate, mascara, drunkenness,
love, lipstick,
studying, shopping, models, blusher, starving, c`r,y`i.n'g,
loathing, mirrors, staring, b
linking
hoping, praying, hiding...

It's ok..., I know...
You don't really give a damn, do you?
Staring into mirrors like they're the ones who care about you.
Like they have more truth than your friends...

It's all a conspiracy theory, don't you think?
The whole damn world is against you.
You don't see?

 

Who are you really?

Author notes

I. Use American Vanity as your prompt. I don't care what you do with it. Just use it.
II. Wryte me a Dirty Pretty. I fucking love those.
III. What pisses you off about people? Specifically. What is it that makes you want to kick their teeth down their throat?
IV. Give me some nitty gritty punk. Attitude galore.

Poeple who feel sorry for themselves, without reason, or who refuse to listen to reason.
True, there really are people with issues. And I'll listen to those people. Without problem.
But posers?
They're another story.

-Fairy Dust

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Comments

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  • moaner
    November 4
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    this was really cool. very raw. loved the feel of this one. well done xxx


  • Roy Flynn silver member
    October 2

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    This is an incredible dirty pretty, You conveyed so much emotion, and just really let all the emotion out. Like really you can feel it when you read it.

    So true, just really makes you think i love it. Just amazing

    "Posers posing
    With laces hanging out..."

    This whole stanza stood out the most. perfectly portrayed

    The ending was a great tie together


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 30
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    Wow this is a great dirty pretty!
    Honestly I dont know how to write one myself ><
    But this is fantastic, so many pictures.
    Splended

    x

  • judmc
    August 21

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    HOODWINKED ! ! !

    An exposition of the antaganisms and pretentiousness through the age gap in adolescence. Wellwritten with some extraordinary imagery cleverly done with a great deal of truth to boot.


  • trekkergirl
    August 20

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    HOODWINK

    I have read your work before and always found them interesting this is one no different than those. I actually liked the way you wrote this one... I know you said you were trying to get them angry and all but you actually wrote a good poem doing it. Thanks for sharing this with us.


  • wbiro gold member
    June 10

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    Hey- you're bashing dirty pretty when you're suppose to BE it... otherwise you hit all your AN goals... I like the philosophical part about mirrors/friends... though my friends are kinder than that guy in the mirror- and the worse are those mirror guys in public- they mock me by looking right at me, wearing the same clothes I do, and mimicking my every move... right in front of everybody... the bastards!

    Well, all I know is, a fad begins in England, hits the American East coast about 4 years later, and makes it to the Midwest about 10 years after that... and is lucky to ever see the South... by the time it get's to the West coast you wouldn't recognize it, and Hollywood then creates a Brady Bunch family show out of it...

    and I see you are an explosion- if you go out with DinkyDiver in real life... well... I'm seeing "nuclear devastation" there...


  • Red Rocket
    May 27
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    "Glitter covered blackness"

    This was accelerated poem, full not only of character but also colorful expressions. It affected my mind to reflect on local bullshit and widespread mental menure spewing from the media. And even better, when it is parroted by average people. Great write.

  • this is awesome! i particularly like the" daddy wanted an A. he gets one followed by R.S.E.H.O.L.E" love it! nice work!

  • moaner
    May 15

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    can't believe you only got a HM for this, i would have given you gold. this is sooooo cool and true. best dirty preety ive read so far x

    (saving points for a contest, but here are some smiles)
    : ) : ) : )

  • My----

    dear girl could not agree with your setiments more!! Posers poseing with laces hanging out glitter colored blackness and pretty prfanity- LOL--> Nice-- im from the states. Is it are shallow materialism--that makes us whole?? I for one agree with you.

  • Ohhh I do like this, it's so creative !

    " Emaciated dummys
    Wearing mISmaTcHed socks
    Thinking they're rebelling
    [Because Mummy rolls them into pairs.] "

    Fav' bit!

    howeverr, could you re-read the rules please? It's just there is a part in there about posting in your author notes, capitilised

    thank you for entering


  • Mariana gold member
    April 20
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    Hunni, you're awesome and you

    Mariana  


  • Sgt. Pepper
    April 15

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    i love this poem, i honestly love it.
    its so bloody true its sickening!
    i myself am daddys little girl, and everything i do that he wouldnt approve of is very thrilling!!xx

  • Chyeah, this kicked ass. The whole first stanza, with the socks. Emaciated dummys. Goddamn.

    And then the line about attitude, too afraid to use it. That was my fave. I. Hate. People like this. And it so sad. Most people are that way. Anyways, I love it. Good luck in my contest by the way.


  • petalblue2
    April 7

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    Fabulous! A true work of art! You walked the reader through the chaotic emotions of a teenage girl. I remember that girl and you have caught her and pasted her on your pages

  • Gotta say I love this side of you! So pissed of with people for what they do! Awesome write!. Love thr fact that you got the Word arsehole out of report grades! very clever. You should get Gold! YOU ROCK!


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    April 6

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    Wow!

    Great great great you rock! Was that suppose to be arsehole up there? Goodluck in this contest, although I dont think you need it coz the attitude and everything in it was awesome! <3

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