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Sober

Cry me a river so i can drown.
Try me again just to see me back down.
Not a pussy, but i linger in darkness, nocturnal forgiveness.
God's my witness, ask him if I ever gave a fuck.
He'll laugh and say good luck, cuz ima bitch.
Hating when I twitch. You wish I had a turn off switch.
I'm a renegade to most, sacrilegious lamb, but I've been misdiagnosed.

Tell me, who the fuck am I, wishing I could die.

It's just a part of life. Struggle, strife. Pen, knife. Listen as the devil plays a fife.

Up all night, trying to make things right. Fuck that, its not like me to be happy.
Still drinkin, smokin weed. No crack, no speed.
It's bad enough when I forget shit when I'm sober.
Sober...Son Of a Bitch, Everything's Real.

                  

                                      My highs over.

 

                                                     How to deal? ...

idk i dont really like it. what do you think?

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  • sgking123 gold member
    November 19
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    well spoken

    autobiographical..where you explain the misamic twist of misunderstanding...dunno if you gave fuck....or twitched....or acted likea bitch...but this poem gave me a pretty nice feel like a swank car hitch....get in mine car and read and comment me..I have a serious mind to get that'filty' off ya...lmao


  • sevnsyn silver member
    April 23
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    Greatness

    Another one of yours that needs a band a a few more verses


  • She burns
    April 10
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    Powerful as always from you your words are just wow

  • you always do so good.

    You can feel the real agony of the piece, a true struggle. I love your writes they are always amazing.

    My favorite part-
    "Sober....Son of a Bitch, Everything's real.
    My high's over.
    How to deal??

    once again, you do a great job!! why don't
    ya like it?