We make love at night in a low-lit zone,
quicksilver and whitewashed glimmers.
Leaving the TV on always feels
oddly titillating, even a tad naughty,
as if those shadows flickering
behind the screen were tiny
voyeurs in a forbidden window.
They tune us in as you turn me on...
Peering eyes watch while intimate fingers
tickle fervor... see love that is steamy
peep-show-sweeping-sweet-sexed-whimsey,
caressed to breathless in our hazy lair.
Our co-minglings are...
for mature audiences only.
Author notes
Image Prompt ~ Artist: Mick Payton ~ By Television Light ~ As usual I'm still fiddlin' around with this...??? Can't quite catch "it" yet, lol!! [edits-2-so far...]
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Peering eyes watch while intimate fingers
tickle fervor... see love that is steamy
peep-show-sweeping-sweet-sexed-whimsey,
caressed to breathless in our hazy lair.
Amen sister. Im all over that. Nicely done, I have no idea what Tom's talking about. He probably wouldnt either, if I asked him right now
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Very pretty honey, you need not worry.
Love,
jin
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"We make love at night in a low-lit zone,
quicksilver and whitewashed glimmers. "
Loved the opening lines as well as the whole of this. What a lovely peep show you give us with this provocative write.
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Oooo! You're so bad! Now I need a cold shower. I'm telling your mother!
Love,
Amera♥
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Awesome thus far, Cia...any fiddling you do will be a plus,
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One of my sisters, when she was small, wouldn't allow us to turn off the TV set 'cause we would kill all the people inside. This reminds me of that, in my own way.
What may be missing here is the feeling of being watched. The stanza '"They tune in while you turn me on"
followed by the TV goes to snow when I tell you to never stop or some such. The idea being a stronger sense of them being drawn by their need to see you set free. Anyway that is my thought. Hope it helps.
Tip of the hat to ye,
Tom B.
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tomisb
I'm not sure I am catching your drift...??? I "don't" want to shift the focus from the lovers being excited by the thought of being watched... over to the voyeurs [they are only imagined...
] But that is what I'm thinking you were suggesting? No worries... I firmed up the concept a bit more,lol!!! 
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Thats better, the sense of titilation, the enjoying of being watched is more prominent now. Your sense comes through more clearly. Well done.
Love, Tom B.
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ok, feeling like I might wish to reconsider becoming a commercial actor no one ever told me of the side line benefits.
great job lol
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woah, Ms. Thica! stream-lined and steady enough to rock for an hour or more. your words are invitingly hammer-toned, shaped and shiftless. good durability in the fascination of the topic and the sway of certainty.
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