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Love's Sweet Seduction!

Eternal solitude burns into ashes as your pursed lips intertwine
Blazes of seduction melt anticipation with your indulging smile
Uncontrollable whims overwhelm the soul,for...
Your beauty robbed me and stumbled me with deep charms unknown.

A contest entry

plz tell me what do you think??

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  • sweet innocence
    April 11
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    ohh!! well I didn't see the word UNKNOWN! I'll add it.sorry, didn't mean it!


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    April 11

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    you did almost every thing [shrudds shoulders] SO WHERE IS THE WORD UNKNOWN AT??? i am very strict about my contest i will think and see if i want to let you make it with one word next time i neeed you to read closely and do exactly what i ask of you.