A unique night I will forever remember
Flow of passion and love so tender.
Submitting my blossom fervently
To my prince who seized it intensely.
Never will I ever forget the night we met
thoughtfully designed with adoration, no regret.
Forbidden love
Dancing finally with my love
Swaying and flying like a dove
Free, stunning night and salsa dance
Meeting was a prize after countless plans
enjoying stolen moments with passion
savoring every morsel of delicious emotion
swinging skillfully, he is a dazzling matador
Every touch warming me, what a splendor!
Delicate frisk in risk for endeavor,
Illicit fervor I am tired of hiding.
I pray for an eternity, eternally waltzing
A dream materializing with my Matador
Taking control of the dance floor
Forbidden love.
invigorating love, dashing to the dock
Entangling, Disentangling, defying the clock
Salsa, tango and waltz, our delight we sneak
What would tomorrow be? Romance at its pea
Making love as we dance
We kiss, we cajole and we prance
The whole night, we hold tight, what a sight!
Liveliness, forgetfulness, living the moment
Of a forbidden love.
Prayers I whisper to the skies above
Forbidden love.
Why does it have to be a sin?
Turning it to a virtue, we can all win.
May our love survive forever.
surpass barriers, be permissible
and the impossible becomes possible,
in a rightful love.
Forbidden love
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This is such a lovely write!
Great job with the emotions portrayed here. Also, beautiful imagery throughout.
Bravo
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Beautifully written piece...it gave me chills and reminded me of some of the work i did...GL
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thank you so much i will read your work
it means a lot to me and those are my feelings
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Emotional, with some great imagery. The rhyme scheme was a little forced in places, and I think it might have worked better if you dropped it all together or spaced out the rhyming words a bit more. But overall, it worked well with the flow. Repeating the words "Forbidden love" at the end of each stanza seemed a little much; Maybe using it at the end of every other, to avoid over repeating it. On a whole, the piece worked well, and was very emotional and well written.
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Very very good =D. I enjoyed this very much
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oh my dear, Thank you for checking it and reading
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