You touched
the budding bloom
with cruel frost,
now perpetual winter
cloaks the heart of trust.
A contest entry
- Prompt In Brevity... by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended April 7, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Di
congrats, great metaphor applied, simple and concise poetry with good supporting rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing.
Jim
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As the bite of winter that should have already been past hits your heart...deep and brillant!
mystic
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So much emotion is compressed in these few words. When one has offered love or friendship and had it rejected and devalued it takes a long time (if ever) to rebound. Trust that has been destroyed is one of life's cruelest turns. Beautifully written. Peace, Liz
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This short yet important verse has more bite than you can know. Very powerful truth in this.
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beautiful
imagery with some much truth..Great write mum Di..xxoo
Brenda
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The budding bloom of trust, I love this image. I agree with the theme of your poem entirely, once trust is gone, things are never the same even though the words "I forgive you" are spoken, the heart of us has that small frozen place that never quite warms again.
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nice way of depicting winter, very well done
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Wonderful
A wonderful use of image in brevity. Best of luck in the contest.
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