I am going to carry my poem around
like a sock-monkey
let its body dangle
under my right arm
with the right hand at my waist
and the left flopping against my back
without a sound
tug at it with body extended
horizontally between each of my hands
stretched from wall towards wall -
envision that four horses will draw us apart
if I do not handle it gingerly
revealing every color
every smell
every taste that may be tasted
yet, still leave me curious
there is this hollow within it
that I have not yet penned –
a cavern where a heart should beat
red stitching of lips that idle like Winter
a voice that ponders annunciation
and rhythmic speech
and soul that lays quietly within
like the poet
A contest entry
- My 50th poem and 10th Contest by Cyanide Dreams.
1050 points, ended April 7, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I donno if I said
but I nabbed this one and stashed it in case you are like me and prone to deleting regularly..
I love the sock monkey
I want a sock monkey like this
lol
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You are a delicate person in your poetry. There is a sweet savory to your words like a pot of pleasant cooking swilling through the rooms as it blends. I am sort of taken back by the curiousness and love within your words and images. I am richer from reading your poems like if I read a new poet in a book I randomly purchased and read in quiet reverie. Thank You.
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the first two stanzas were my fave
the middle dwindled
but the last two brought it back home
and that's the truest input i can give in my
inebriated state
just west of Arkansas
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i think i'm going to go make a steak sammmwich with peppa's and sweet onions at this hour... in your state, I likely shouldn't be sharing that with you, huh?
might not be able to smell it cooking from up in the attic!
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somehow the title makes me want to play pocket-pool...
and I don't know why?
perhaps I should read on...... lol -
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just busted out laughing...
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Your words definitely epitomize poetry. The poems flows with such ease which always leaves me filled with envy and admiration. The "hollow" stanza and the strong finish were my favorite parts. Bravo!
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Wow, I really liked this. Great metaphor in this, but not so abstract as to leave the reading saying "what?". I think I liked your prewrite a bit better though
That's amazing. But you did put alot of emotion and imagery in this, and your metaphor has improved greatly from your prewrite to this. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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thanks so much for the comments/ compliments Josh. they are greatly appreciated.
Kim
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totally enjoyed this Kim. it's really nice to read imaginative & clear metaphor like this, i love the quiet soul inside it -- lovely!
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I loved the sock monkey metaphor, lol. Fantastic imagery.
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if you haven't already - you should consider entering one of your new writes for this. your muse is far more active than mine. (way more - even).
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an overactive muse, an underactive moi. lol.
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Thanks so much Kathleen. I tried
Hope it's not raining where you are. I'm here returning notes and am putting off the list of things to do. (sigh)
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no it's that locked in white-light I have really gotten to hate, makes me listless.
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I want a sock monkey!
this is one of those poems that reminds me I need to stretch my imagination more.... really clever.
you got da coolest sock monkey i ever seen
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Thanks a million Suzanne. I'm so glad this one came out well. I never had a sock monkey either when I was a kid but was inspired by a cooking show where they displayed a cake of one that was pretty damn cute.
thanks for the kind words.
Kim
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What a wonderful and creative metaphor you've applied here! Somehow this made me think of a poem i've read about how a poem wanders around the world; to learn it lovingly by heart, is to walk with it. And the hollow....that usually takes more than one attempt, more than one poem, but you've expressed that so very softly here. Lovely poetry, Kim.
~ Nicolette
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I was watching the food channel this past week and a woman baked a cake of a sock monkey. The damn little monkey was stuck in my head as I walked around the house doing chores. Had to let the little guy out somewhere. lol
I would have loved to read the other poem you said this reminded you of... I bet it was wonderful.
Thanks for the kind words Nicolette. I hope you enjoy your day.
-- Kim
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