Through the clouds and through the rain
Through the hail and through the pain
Searching for you, my lost love
Searching for you, my golden dove
Everywhere, beyond the seas
Into the land of the brave and the free
Beyond the heavens and into Hell
In the stores and houses and wells
Through the clouds and through the rain
Through the hail and through the pain
Searching for you, my lost love
Searching for you, my golden dove
Wandering the deserts and waves
In the pains, mountains, and graves
Hoping to find a trace of you
Hoping to never feel this blue
Through the clouds and through the rain
Through the hail and through the pain
Searching for you, my lost love
Searching for you, my golden dove
I've found out this fact and it's true
I'll never venture away from you
You are gone and untraceable
But never will you be, unerasable
Author notes
I chose the prompt- untraceable
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kool
kool poem , i like your writing style , this poem rhymes perfectally!
wonderful =)
byyyyyyyye
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Ah ha! Victory!
I figured it out! Sweet as poem too! I am ao glad i get to comment you. I love it. It keeps rhythm and flow throughout and is really quite beautifully descripted. Nice work -
Very, very nice. That was well written and I loved the way you repeated that verse and did it without making the reader regret it for you. Sometimes when poets repeat verses or lines, you find yourself thinking...OK, I get it already.
I'm impressed. Once again, very nice.
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this is genuine
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Adored where you took the prompt.
I enjoyed the easy flowing rhyme you displayed here.
Also, the use of repetition gave it a lyrical feel.
Content wise, the emotion was very powerful, your wording really emphasised that.
Thanks for entering.
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Beautifully written, very sad. Only thing I would change, maybe is in stanza (2) In the stores and house and wells.. It might read smoother if you say( In the stores, houses and trees) Just an Idea?
Goodluck in the contest..
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