Is this what you wanted to see?
What I'm..."like"
Me? I'm like a cat.
Perfectly content
Studying..
Waiting to make my move
I can let you pass
or
Eat you alive.
Depends on how hungry I am.
Cover you like a shadow,
Wrap you in myself,
Then
Smother you.
Making your every breath painful.
Your last longing will be for death.
What's the matter pretty?
Cat got your tongue?
Author notes
Curiousity will never kill this cat...This cat will kill curiousity.
Comments
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yeah! I like this. threatening but strangely erotic.. Buyer beware!
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OH
MY
HOLY
COW
I've been reading through your poetry, and you've got me hooked. The imagery's beautiful, and the way you end each poem is utterly incredible. And the cat in this piece is just so...insanely confident in his sadistic little way, it's breathtaking.
Favourited, favourited, and favourited.
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*grin*
This is EXCELLENT!!!! Playfully dark, lurking in mystery. I love it. It flows with a nice rhythm, keeps the readers attention & doesn't disappoint! Very well written!!!!
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what an awesome comment, thank you much.
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omg!! i luv it!! its sooo you. back to the jungle baby.
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thank you baby!
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hahaha this is great! i especially enjoyed the ending... "whats the matter pretty? cat got your tongue?" that was awesome! and i also loved liked the author notes.
haha well i loved this!!!!
huggggggglezzz,
adria <3
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sick, sly, sadistic
i love it.
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This was a different styling poem. It had a firey motion i cnat put my finger on flowing through out your words. I can taste the darkness in it. Lovely
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great ending to a very intriguing poem. I can't help but think of my exwife! lol I like the lines "perfectly content studying, waiting to make my move". Very cat like indeed. An enjoyable read.
Rory
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I agree
I'm a fragile sort of man... You've killed my curiousity entirely!
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I like this a lot. It is deep, dark and forboding. I like your imagery. Keep writing.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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oh my gosh this gave me chills....it made me feel like I was being circled by a monster....weird. and loved it!
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excellent take on the prompt sent chills through me good luck!!!!!
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MAMA-CAT!!! I love it!!! It's so you! lolz
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wow
Wow!I loved it!I epsecially like the last two lines!Great poem from a great poet, well done!
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Wow this is amazing.
You are a great writer.
Well done
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Damn...you don't f**** around!
Smother you.
Making your every breath painful.
Your last longing will be for death.
I wouldn't wanna run in to you in a dark ally!
I loved it..great job!
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very nice work, I'd like to add you to my favorites if i may....
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This was just downright amazing! It was so coy and clever and so very dark...I want to read more of your work! Great write!
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bravo!times3?
you are fierce! i believe that is the only word to describe that write.
i can honestly say i look forward to reading more of your writes.
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Gold
All you can try and do is come out with gold. Thats wicked cool. Great in fact. Simply short and perfect. -
I love feline imagery for women. 'Cover you like a shadow' is in my opinion the strongest line, and the last two give the poem a lighter tone that I think works to its advantage. I find that the last line of the first stanza disrupts the flow of the poem
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wow i like that alot. never read anything like that. its a very powerful poem and it makes you sound very confidnt in it. i love that!
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In regards to---
Your last line--My answer is Yes!--And I am Pretty_ How did you know?-True feeling is talent and you express it well!
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horrible world
After a good first line, why so much gloom? What on earth has the rest of the world - not just the people and parts of the US she knows- actually done? No beautiful world out there?
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What an oddly enticing poem. So well written and beautiful description. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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sweeeeeeeeeet
i absolutely love this write. subtly seductive but with a sense of dangerous playfullness. i had to read this a few times and it made me smile, knowing there are girls out there who still know what they are doing.
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purrrrrrrrrfect lol...this was great...loved it
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I loved this. I liked the voice, and I was stunned with the emotion. You did a great job.
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I loved it
It is smug..... perfect...lol
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Do you know, this poem speaks of what I fear about women? It's that power you all have - damn you haha!
A great sexy poem - I am weak at the knees
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sick
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wicked, confident...what is there not to raise eyebrows to? You are a very interesting writer and I hope you will continue entering my contests. Love, Lane
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I loved this every word held me enthralled. I love cats of all kinds and their mystic and you have captured it excellently in these words.
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Ferocity
I really like this for it shows that you have some passion and knowledge of what it is that you want or should I say what it means to be a woman of this day and age (ahem! albeit whom am I to say for I am but a man).
I like it, I like it so!
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No matter how much the cats fight, there always seem to be plenty of kittens.Abraham Lincoln (1809 - 1865)
I rather enjoy the persona of a fierce predator to metaphor the "hunt" that we all entertain. Nothing in this world rivals falling prey to a confidant woman.
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very nice i love the pic to top it off great work....
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More Like Cat Your tail
'Curiousity will never kill this cat...This cat will kill curiousity." More like the cat will use all 9 lives and die tryN it's own addiction.**I can let you pass**
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great poem pregnant with meanings
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I love this writing miss. Kill the fucker
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awesome great work
wow i love it from begining to end
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loved the pic..
loved the piece even more, and your last line is a trip! l.o.l. yeah, this was good lady, real good..you sound tempting and dangerous, but also very inviting like your author's notes warn..
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I have the panther as a tattoo he is my spirit minder . im a big pussy too and you a very fiesty .lovable feline . loved this work
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Nothing more to say other than this is FUCKING insame! XD Luv ya hun.
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oh my god!
Please tell me your real.
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this is so fricken good! there isnt one line that doesnt grab you! the whole thing was like a cat! a wild cat.no house cat here!
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Thats really good tooo.... Nice.
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This is awesome! Very confident and creative the last two lines perfectly tied it all together!
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I love it! The last two lines are hilarious but furthermore your descriptions and imagery is amazing! I could not stop reading, you had me at 'Is...' lol
LOOVED IT
Rachael
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I would have to strongly agree with Lady Symphonia....Very Very Alluring indeed, with that slight sweet temptation of enticing the one in. Very well written!
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Oooo, yeah, hun, I love this. Very alluring and sweetly enticing.
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ah yes
and only a cat can look at a king well done
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Thank you, your comment means alot to me
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Ha Ha.. your an is just so clever. great write and i love the sarcasm at the end.
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Oh my! I loved it. My favourite lines were definitely,
I can let you pass
or
Eat you alive.
Depends on how hungry I am.
Brilliant!
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This is awsome. Penned well. Makes me feel fiesty, good way to get the blood to pump. Excellent. Thanks for the share.
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fantastic. this is a truly remarkable and almost frightening piece. i felt quite intimidated!!!
well done on this. i hope you do well in the contest.
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damn thats deep
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I like the analogy and the way you spoke of making your every breath painful.LOl I have a cat..love them and this poem Hugs Angel
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Holy shit. this is fierce. I can't help but to wonder what you would do to another given the chance.
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Good luck in contest.
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That is badassed.
The speak of suffocation is described here as so satisfying and pleasurable by the hunter.
Your aggressiveness comes out wonderfully in this one. -
don't eat me...
i love the threatening cast over the entire piece. as already noted it has beautiful tonal quality. i especially love how casual the "death threat" and how you follow up with,
"Depends on how hungry I am."
awesome!
peace
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ohh I love the hast lines here, gave me chills!
I love the haunting darkness that you carry on throughout the poem so consistently.
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awesome!
This made me smirk..in a knowing way. I LOVED how you used these metaphors, I loved the wit, and I loved the attittude..an impowered prowl..words told in a "watch out!" kinda way. I loved most how you didn't fade it into something nice. you stuck it all out.. and I agree withthe others this was fierce. I loved every line, more intense and just awesome.. but the last line.. *had a big smile on my face*.
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great write. you made the title come alive in each line. i liked the intense feeling it gave when reading it. you did a good job carrying the cat throughout the entire piece and that bit of an edge set it on fire... a feeling of being clawed.
the author's notes even continue that theme more.... made me smile. nice touch.
good luck in the contest.
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Nice write.
The irregularity fits the topic =) -
La Petit Mort, Part 2
ho-ly shit...
DANGER
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pounce little kitty cat.. pounce!! good luck in the contest
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I like the analogy you use.
you're fierce
nice border by the way
& goodluck in the contest.
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Wonderful write---I might enjoy being eaten alive----Hmmmmmm.
How do you know that each isn t painful and at times I don t long for an end---some peace.
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wonderfully penned hon.
Best wishes to you in the contest
Love
Passions
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