Gloomy Sunday afternoon’s radios softly scream to me
wind chimes in the distance delicately dance in harmony
Dogs bark while the breeze blows
Love peace--
For it comes and goes
My mind is in the promise land
While wasting away in this cultural wasteland
Women with their children and expensive purses
Standing in church pews memorizing bible verses
Dear Sunday,
The sounds silence is truly killing me.
My grandfather once was blind but today he can see.
For baptism is just a bathtub away.
And now for me to sit back and witness the wind chimes sway.
Author notes
The feeling of a higher power, the weak feeling in your knees, the feeling that makes your heart fly...oh 
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Comments
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this is so simple and sweet, but so full and rich.
i'm beginning to believe that you are a genius.
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Really good job with this piece.
Nice flow and imagery here.
Bravo
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Gloomy Sunday afternoon’s radios softly scream to me
wind chimes in the distance delicately dance in harmony
Dogs bark while the breeze blows
Love peace--
For it comes and goes
This is my favorite part, it has great imagery and it reminds me of some of my days
Thanks for entering and gooooood luck -
For baptism is just a bathtub away.
i really liked this line. great write. it was interesting.
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WOW, Brilliant
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
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I like the mood of this poem. Also liked the way you broke up the last two lines of the first stanza with the words "Love peace" as it gives a little bump to the meter that I found very effective. Also the way you tie the poem together with the image of the wind chimes. Good write.
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Good imagery,and descriptive words in this. I liked what I read in this piece. You did another fine effort!
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oh this just meanders through the soul, its absolutely beautiful, and really well constructed, it really captures the sunday ambience.This is a seriously nice write
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a very beautifull and vivd write, i realy enjoyed the soft flow of this, such a nice write x
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Loved the lines "love peace for it comes and goes" (ain't that the truth) and "baptism is just a bathtub away." lol It's a good thing God made salvation so easy, eh? I just hope it's not as easy for Saddam Hussein as it is for good guys like your grandpa. Well done.
Mark
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thank you!!
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This is plesant!
WhenI read this poem I was overwhelmed with peace. This is a strong write and I truley enjoyed every bit of It. Thanks! -
This is such a wonderful write, good luck in the contest. Wonderfully written and it was a pleasure to read.
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Nice!
Like the way you express your emotions here. There's no joy better than that which we can be blessed with by our heavenly Father. I love the content, imagery & word choice you use here. You bring this poem to life & it paints quite the picture. I think I'd present this a bit differently, but I'm happy to have read this!
I'm going to send you a suggestion.
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What beautiful and poetic imagery! It is a well stated message that flows, peaceful yet thought provoking. Good luck in the contest!
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this is wonderful! simply beautiful! i am not in the best of moods so am reading the entries in this contest to feel better. thank you for helping me. good luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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i love this :]
the image you have captured is incredible
"For baptism is just a bathtub away"
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i really like this poem!!
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the imagery was amazing and the flow and rhythm to the piece was brilliantly done. this was a great read. good job with this one.
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I like the imagery of the radios softly screaming, the wind chimes, and the dogs barking. I felt the poem moved very nicely from scene to scene, and I like the line "For baptism is just a bathtub away." Peace does come and go, and everyone needs to find his or her own.... Nicely written!
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thank you!!!
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solid write
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thank you!!
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beautiful... and congratulations to your grandfather. i think i was baptised when i was five of six...i need to start going to church again...
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i often think the same...im just not sure anymore, eventhough i was baptized when i was fifteen
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i want to. i just can never seem to find a church that fits me. i mean, i'll be ok for a while, but then io start to feel... not right. just not comfortable. like an outsider, and i don't belong. so i stop going.
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I totally agree with you and you should not feel like an outsider at church...thats why I dont go. There are so many hypocrites in this world.
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yeah... i just can't understand why i feel forced to go sometimes and then feel like it's wrong. ahh well. maybe i'll find one that suits me someday.
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