Your straightjacket sanctuary
kept me safe from myself.
You fed me tiny pills that
stacked my pain upon a shelf.
The solace of your vagueness
left me reality-released,
but as you spiraled backward
my clarity increased.
Ignorance found no option
once the fog was lost,
and facing new horizons
didn’t come without a cost.
Exposed nerves chased the wind
- we said our last goodbyes,
but it wasn’t you that I would miss
it was the safety of your lies.
…and still today I fear to feel
for haze was my addiction.
The broken crystal ball was you,
my comfortable prediction.
Author notes
The “comfort” found in the uncomfortable situation of preferring a life of lies as opposed to facing the truth. Sometimes a person grows so used to lies, deceit and betrayal that there is a feeling of safety in knowing what to expect.
(but after you divorce his sorry ass it all gets MUCH better, lol)
A contest entry
- B-WOW #2 with islekine, aboomer, Starz of Heaven... by islekine.
700 points, ended April 7, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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right on
awsome i thought this was good very discriptive of your condition.
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A very strong and frank write. Yes we all sometimes ignore the truth for a perceived safe harbor.. Damn you are good. Excellent write.
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Been there done that! Moved on! Could totally relate to this so well done!
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Not easy behind lied to. Can't take it. Good write here Jamie! Congratulations on the gold!
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Great!
I read this poem over and over and I really enjoyed reading it too! Congratulations on the Gold, most definitely deserved win. -
Well...
About time! haha... I've been wondering when you'd write a new poem. A Golden one at that! I see you've not lost your touch. Bravo!
"Exposed nerves chased the wind" my favorite line.
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Ah yes, I know the comfort of those lies.. as short-lived as they are. And you are so right, it all gets much better after that!! lol
Excellent write here, the rhyme was wonderfully done! Congrats on the deserved Gold!
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Great poem. My favorite line was "it wasn't you I would miss, it was the safety of your lies"
incredibly well written -
Applause-Applause-Applause!
Feasted upon every word
carefully sculpted upon this poem!
applause-applause-applause
Keep up the fantastic writing,
thankyou for sharing this absolute
jewel of a poem!
ears/Seattle
WELL DONE! WELL DONE!
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wow. with each stanza i felt as if i was beginning a new poem with a beginning that intrigues you instantaneously C:
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Great job on the poem and congratulations on the gold.
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What lies do we endure for the sake of not moving to greener pastures, it is the self-imposed restraint that we do sometimes embrace.
"Exposed nerves chased the wind
- we said our last goodbyes,
but it wasn’t you that I would miss
it was the safety of your lies."
These lines did speak to me of the certainty one felt that lying without telling lies was something we had mastered yet not it is to be rebuilt for a castle of cards surely faulters at the slightest hint of the wind.
I like it, I like it so!
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Well Dear Jamie first let me say lol I am still laughing at your authors notes I loved the last two lines of this poem amazing job here thanks for taking the time to enter our contest be well.
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Fab
Thought this was great, powerful. Well done.
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These lines...
"but it wasn’t you that I would miss
it was the safety of your lies.
…and still today I fear to feel
for haze was my addiction."
are wonderful and well placed to your ending.
The poem flows and rhymes well and is a read worthy of a quiet moment.
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Really great flow in this poem, I loved the rhyming which you did flawlessly. Great job, and good luck in the contest you entered.
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Superb Plus +
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
You go girl. Oh how I feel you on this one.
I don't know what I like more your poem or your
author notes. Know what? I love both.
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Great!
I liked your AN almost as much as the write
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I know these feelings well, and the unease of being comfortable with the bullshit. Then you decide you best do something about it, and you know what? Once you do, it does get much better. Great piece.
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Stupid Me!!!
I forgot the very deserved little yellow guys!
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Boy, did this one speak to my heart!! I know it all so well, but could never have spoken it as well as you have penned it here. That "comfort" comes with a very high price of lost time and self respect. Thank God some of us are able to see that before it's too late. Thanks for sharing this, Jamie...I love reading your work!
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Love the depth of images and emotions in this - something I think most can relate to.
(love your AN's....lol
I especially liked,
'but it wasn’t you that I would miss
it was the safety of your lies.'
I think that's so true for so many - even though they are living a lie, it is comfortable to them, they are used to it and prefer it to being alone....
nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes
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this is great, its sad yet overcoming. Good job
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wish i would have read it earlier.
but im lost
i have nothing in me
wish my soul could fly towards skies
wish i never made love ones, so tht no one could hurt me.
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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wow beautiful and haunting laungage nice image of cyrstal ball good job here
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As always, awesome writing. Natural rhyme, thoughtful reason. I always love reading your poetry.
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Well penned Jamie!
I didn't need your author's notes.....lol...but really enjoyed em! Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
The solace of your vagueness
left me reality-released,
but as you spiraled backward
my clarity increased.
This is truly briliant!
and
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How true your words are. Lies are the means to cover the truth that one does not want to tell. this write is very thought provoking ,
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